Title: Late Night
Reviewed By: Quiet Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2009 22:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, I want to thank you for writing a "mature" fanfic about "Skip Beat!" It certainly helps my thirst for not only more interaction between Kyoko and Ren but it also addresses my need for some hentai activity between the two. Since your story is short, I would imagine that its purpose is to give us a quick smutty account about the two. For that I believe that you have succeeded. I don't know about the whip cream can. All I can think of are these big tall cans that are similar to spray paint so I had a hard time imagining it being inserted in her "channel." Perhaps it was only the tip that was going in. Hmm...maybe I should read it again. I did like how Ren spanked her. That showed how turned on he was by her self-ministrations. I would have liked to have heard a bit about her reaction when she realized that he's there. I mean, did she know that he had been there all along (and that is why she didn't react), or was she embarrassed about being discovered? And knowing how Ren enjoys teasing her, it would have been great to hear how he feasts off of her in those terms. Heh. To sum up, I would have liked more details and that the story were longer but I admit that I did enjoy myself reading it. Again, thanks for writing this story. And yes, I'm a Ren x Kyoko fan all the way-- but I am not opposed other pairings. ;-) Best, QS
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