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| "Shikamaru" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Hmm...
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2009 03:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
I won't bother with a rating unless you continue the story. I wonder who Shikamaru-chan was talking to. It's not often that Shikamaru gets his own story unless it is comedic or lemony (at least as far as I've seen), and I wonder how this one will turn out? You have my OK for this project. I just hope it won't be one of those stories where the present characters (especially Naruto) get shunted and become ancilliary. While I don't mind characters getting their own story, I don't like it when the other characters appear once and then are no longer a part of the story. No matter. So far so good. Though... don't go too heavy on OCs, as they can get annoying or evenworse become a mary sue (whatever the hell that is), and detract from the story. Supporting cast is good, displacing everyone (including the protagonist of the story) is bad. Keep up the good work. Ja Ne. The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion Now, where did I leave my Ancillary Annihilator Tissue...
| Reviewed By: adamisk417 On: April 26, 2009 13:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
vary good plz keep going i would like to read more of this in the furcher
| Title: Hmmm...
Reviewed By: TailsPrower (unlogged) On: April 24, 2009 09:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad. Good start dude. Keep it up! (It's sad that not many review anymore)
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