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Title: Good Stuff
Reviewed By: Cablefast On: June 21, 2009 00:30 EDT
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You know, I haven't read an Inuyasha fanfic in a long time. I came to this website to see if an ending had been posted to another story I started reading months ago. Needless to say, for some reason your story sucked me in. From the title to the last posted chapeter, I read it all in one sitting. Keep up the good work and I hope to see another chapeter soon.
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Reviewed By: IDoInuyasha31 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2009 14:56 EDT
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So excited to see an update. Another good chapter. What a lucky girl Kagome is...same mate different sex. :)
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Reviewed By: fireandicepixie On: June 08, 2009 02:27 EDT
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what a wonderful story. i cant wait for the update. also there is a wonderful website for just inu/kag stories. its called Eternal Destiny. here is the address: www.ik-eternal.net. please came and check it out.
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Reviewed By: IDoInuyasha31 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2009 23:22 EDT
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another great couple of chapters. keep up the good writting
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Reviewed By: Ryo5492 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2009 21:22 EDT
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lol thanks for the new chappyXP this chapter brought sooo many new scenarios in my headXD omg i cant wait until the story continues and i find out which one is rightXD assuming that one of them is gonna be rightXD lol something tells me you have somethnig up your sleeve completely unexpectedXD cant wait=D
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Reviewed By: Ryo5492 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2009 21:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i really like your story so farXD the plotline is soo wowXP lol cant wait for teh next chapter=D
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Reviewed By: Inubride On: May 23, 2009 14:26 EDT
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I am really enjoying the fanfic and can't wait to read on
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Reviewed By: charmander is cool On: May 23, 2009 02:08 EDT
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I have to say this is really good, it is hard to follow, but only because of the originality. I have never seen this plot before and the fact that you are daring to use it, is awesome. I encourage you to continue writing, and hopefully make this a career. Your style of writing is good. So snapps to you!
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2009 03:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting. Pretty Original! This is going to be a pretty good fic.
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2009 19:46 EDT
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Couple things come to mind, not that it matters but my handle is not capitalized because only names are capitalized; youkaineko is what I am, not who I am. Anyway it seems very odd to me that the princess let the boys bathe first. She is royalty, wouldn't it be considered unseemly to allow a slave to bathe first? Also as you pointed out it is a very recent thought that children are not young adults. And girls were routinely married off at age 13 or younger. At age 10 within that kind of society she would be about 16 within our own. It is also a modern convention that children should be hidden from knowledge of sex, and even that is mostly an American viewpoint. This is not to say they were encouraging children to have sex before marriage, simply that it was common knowledge that sex existed. After all it's kind of hard to hide such knowledge when they saw the farm animals breeding every year, and most families shared a single bed. And just a thought, but wouldn't the princess want to hide the identities of the older Inuyasha and Kagome from the palace at large until after speaking with the king? I think it would have been more impressive had they walked the halls wearing hooded cloaks, and then revealed themselves before the king by dropping their hoods.
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2009 06:19 EDT
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It seems SplendentGoddess beat me to the punch. I was going to say that you could have time move differently between the two worlds like Narnia does so that even if they were there for years very little if any time had passed in the other world. That would allow for an adult princess to show up before the hut full of pups. Alternately time might move slower there so that even if the adventure takes only a few days that it would have been months in the cannon universe so that adult princess Kagome shows up years after the pups are grown up, perhaps around the time that the cannon couple are about to reintroduce themselves to Kagome's modern family. I also agree with her that is would make for a good premises for a sequel, to have them show up in the cannon universe. On a completely different topic I noticed in that Hollywood style of "plant and pay-off" the solution to Princess Kagome's problem of being separated from Yasha. Inuyasha already explained that children can become mates without having to mate. Now the only question is does Yasha even know that that is an option.
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Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2009 02:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So far so good, and while I know we're jumping the gun here a little bit, I think the concept of an adult 'desert world' Princess Kagome and Yasha falling into the canon world would make an excellent sequel. It should be easy enough to explain away why they have aged, yet not enough time has passed for our Inuyasha and Kagome for them to already have a litter of 'pups'. Kaede looks like their Kaede except with both eyes, right? Okay then, so time is already obviously a little screw-bally between the two universes. Completely ignoring for the moment the fact that in the canon universe, Kagome's actually from Inuyasha's future, and he's already 200-ish by the time they reach the time period Kagome ends up traveling back to, there's no way Kaede should be an elderly woman while they're both still kids! That means that the dynamics of space and time are different between alternate universes, which means...screw the logic that one year in one universe should equal one year in the other universe. If you want to tie it all together with some semblance of logic, just end this story eventually that the journey took however many months or whatever you want it to take, and then when they go back, they poof back into their world the exact moment (or close enough) to when they left, Sango and Miroku never even knowing they were gone. That will excuse the plausibility of the sequel by explaining that time passes more quickly for the other universe.
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2009 02:06 EDT
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hehe this is cute. I'm very curious as to where you're going with this story. Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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Title: Interesting...
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2009 12:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Looks like you've got yourself two unique ideas nicely rolled into one. Your AU in and of itself consists of a plot I've never seen used before, and I would probably be interested in continuing to read a normal story about how young Kagome and Inuyasha continue to hide their love as they grow up, until they can finally no longer take it and start a secret, forbidden romance. Then on the other hand, you've got the canon, post-manga characters, tossed into an almost "Jetsons meet the Flintstones" kind of AU/Canon clash. I've never seen the 'canon character thrust into an AU world with their own duplicates' scenario done before, except for one exception by TwistedHilarity that's uh...completely different from your story in every way. I'm really looking forward to seeing how this creation of yours plays out. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2009 03:59 EDT
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oooh this is a really unique story. I've love to read the next chapter! Little Inuyasha and Kagome are so cute! Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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