| "Jewel Shard's Bail Bonds" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] |
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Title: Love it!!
Reviewed By: inu - baby [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2009 03:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the story so far please update soon!! Also i've been reading your other story (which is also great). Anywho I can't wait!!
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Reviewed By: kagome012 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 07:28 EDT
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omfg! Cant stop typing! Sorry babe! But my new Acc, If it works will be called DarkWolveSpirit! So if ya need to contact me, ill be there!
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Reviewed By: kagome012 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 07:26 EDT
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SORRY! Should have revised that...>.> I ment "Im now starting my own book" Sorry!
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Title: Ah!!!
Reviewed By: kagome012 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 07:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omfg! I started crying when I figured out it wasnt finished. No offence. Im a writer. I used to write fanfiction but I stopped and Im not moving on to my own book. It love hows its turning out. (P.S. Im a fan of finished books, and I would think It would get pissed of I read a whole series and a new book was comeing out in like a year! Lol. Havnt expienced....YET! Lol. Yeah, You need to put your work in tighter paragraphs, and dont be afriad to put saying like "omfg I love you to...bleh bleh bleh" in the paragraph, its completely fine, just only use one voice in a paragraph in a way. But you absoululty wonderful at writing and have a good imagination, I just started getting back on this website today, cause I began to remember it way back when (two to three years ago). But keep up the work, Im here for ya all the way! If ya need any tips Im here always babe!
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2009 21:10 EDT
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I don't usually point out formatting problems, since I know MM often creates them, but since you just reposted chapter one and have found yourself a beta to help with the editing, I figured I should. For some reason every new line that is supposed to start with a quotation mark begins with a lower case letter "g". Also you seem to have lost all of the spacing between paragraphs. My guess is that your editor was using a different font when doing the editing and that might have created the formatting problem when it was uploaded.
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2009 04:21 EDT
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oh no, i didnt hate the rin/sess, i appreiciated it for what it was... and it was really cute... did i mention that i love the way you're portraying the original kikyo? well, incase i didnt... i love it... i like the idea that kagome and kikyo arnt really all that different. i mean ofcourse they are to a certain degree but they resemble one another in manner as well as looks... and im loving the kouga bashing... god hes a jackass in this story... now generally im not one for the bashing of kouga. but, you're so good at it. lol. is naraku gonna be in the story? (you dont have to tell me...) oh and you unintentionally gave me a consolation prize... i may have to deal with the rin/sess moments... but youre at least sparing me the kagura/sess moments... because i really really really dont like that pairing... oh, and i had another question... about the beads... does inu yasha know of them? if the original kikyo died before she could give them to him then does he even know about them? and well, if he doesnt then why/how did myoga(sp?)? (again, you dont have to answer that... i would love it if you did, but if it would give something away, then dont...) anywho, i think this is the longest review ive ever written... ever. but i felt especially compliamented(sp?) at being refered to as your "most diligent" reviewer... so i thought id go the extra mile... but like i was saying, great chapter, love the way your mind works, cant wait for the next chapter, update soon!
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Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2009 02:35 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 11 I just love it. I love the little glimpse into Inuyasha and Koga's story. Now all we have to do is ger Inu to open up and tell Kagome about it. Oh, Sesshomaru and Rin their so cute. Hey when will Inu tell Kagome the story of his life and did Koga really kill Kikyo and ..I have so many questions but I see you laughing and shaking your head "You have to keep reading" and I will...Please Please update soon.
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Title: Great work!
Reviewed By: deathlord86 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2009 15:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just read up on your fanfics. I got to say I am big fan already. Ive been reading since both of your fanfics started. Keep up the great work. Deathlord86
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2009 21:30 EDT
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simple and sweet, and still not fufilling... but again, thats the point... oh how i hope inu yasha makes a move! and i want kouga to get his ass kicked... i dont ever care who does it... (though it would make me thoroughly happy if it was kagome.) im very impressed with how quickly you get updates out, if makes me happy to see that i have mail, and even more so when i realise its another chapter. infact, im so impressed i wont pester you for a fast update... because i know you will.
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Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2009 03:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I chapter 9. Please write me in the story so I can push Koga off a cliff. I know I know, Koga will get what's coming to him I can't wait till that happens. I'll be a good girl and wait. Please Please update soon :) P.S..I'M REALLY SORRY FOR REVIEWING TWICE...BUT HELL THE STORY IS GOOD.
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2009 22:54 EDT
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...i dont know if i like this chapter or not... i mean, it was good. and obviously an important one... but it just left so much unsaid... then again, im sure that was the point... anywho, dispite my misgivings it was a good chapter, cant wait for the next one...
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Title: Danny Girl
Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2009 03:26 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 8 and how you set it up. From everyones point of view. that was so cool. I can't wait till chapter 9. Please have Inuyasha kick Koga's ass. Will we find out who he was talking to on the phone was it really a business call? Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2009 02:11 EDT
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oh my god im so sorry... ive been reading this story for a while now, and have been too lazy to leave a review... but when i saw that you only had two i felt so bad. this story is great, please dont stop updating because there are so many people like me who are just to lazy to leave a word of encouragement. i really do like this story, and though i could do without the rin/sesshoumaru pairing, i just skim over that part...
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Reviewed By: Colin112 On: June 28, 2009 01:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story so far with good writing and a different plot which is nice to see. Looking forward to seeing and reading more. Just don't have Kagome be raped by Kouga because rape is awful. The fact thet have fooled around is enough torture but Yash is going to have work to get her. Nice job.
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Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2009 01:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story. I finally caught up with this story I stop to read your other story 'What Happens in Vegas. Your good.
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