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| "Konoha High School The New Bi Girl" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Tala Kay [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2009 12:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! Especially your character! :) Write more pleaassee :) (I took note of the grammar thing since you wrote it at 12:30.)
| Reviewed By: Houkakyou [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2009 06:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
That's a cute beginning and your chapter length is just right! This story has major potential, but be careful! If you keep elevating Tabitha like that and giving her great looks, intelligence, and awesome fighting ability, she's going to turn into a mary sue. And nobody likes a mary sue. (They're an OC and the entire plot revolves around them being the best and et cetera. Look it up on wikipedia if you're confused.) The title could also be changed, so tread some new territory on that, ok? But great start!
| Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2009 04:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You stopped.... that's mean. I'm really intrigued where this is going and I like thwe tie in's with the Sand siblings. The story looks like it has a lot of potential and I can't wait to read more ;)
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