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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2010 00:59 CDT
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You didn't loose me I'm still here. I don't know whats wronge with Katan he's awsome. I would love to be his slave. But all through this chapter all I could say was "Poor Yuli". I feel so bad for him. But I'm shore he can find someone that can deal with his life if he dosen't die frist of course. But I'm rooting on him finding Jason's sister and comeing out alive. By the way I got your friends story and I'll be shore to read it. So keep up the good work and I'll be waiting on your next update.
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Reviewed By: desideria [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2010 22:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the story please update soon.
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Title: yay!!!!!!
Reviewed By: AngelicDevil [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2010 15:14 CDT
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im so glad you updated!!!!!!! I've always felt terrible when im reading a story and the authors stops writing it befores its finished! i seem to have the bad luck that whichever story i like the authors don't, so they don't finish it. :( You're the first author to update (of the stories i've read)!!!!!!!!! so happy!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol :D i can't wait for that bdsm part. :D!! keep up the awesome work!
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Reviewed By: Maiden's Slave [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2010 08:40 CDT
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This is getting good. Your story is amazing!
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Reviewed By: Deangelised [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2010 05:55 CST
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Hey! Been a long time ^__^. Firstly, I'd like to start with the little mistakes I caught but I was reading it and saved them on a notepad half asleep as it is. Soo, just go through them again ~__~. It starts from uuh...chapter 17 or 18 forgot x3. I had some other corrections but I'm no longer sure where I saved them...oh and btw, grats! If you get to put it on that site. Anyway! I'm beginnin to see where you're going =3. Poor Jason, breaking down like that. x3. I hope I get to read some yummy BDSM smutty scene soon. I'm looking forward to it =3. ANYWAY D: Here: He tried to analyze himself, tried to answer the question as to why he felt so entitled. What made him think he was above being a slave? He was just an orphan boy who nobody wanted. If he were to freeze to death right here the only to miss him would be Kara. * only one Now that he really thought about it, he vaguely remembered a vessel couple, a man and a woman who would visit at their home frequently *visit their home (I think =|) They were always bringing he and Kara presents from their travels. He couldn't recall their names. * bringing him and Kara Visions of snow angels, and he and his mother dressing a snowman. *as well as him and his mother dressing a snowman So when didI start hating the cold? *Missing space Jason's eyebrows furrowed as he concentrated hard. He recalled the briefest sensation that he had been held captive someplace cold before, but his thoughts were disrupted as a sharp pain erupted in his head, causing him to cry out as his hands flew to his head. *some place - (space) + erRupted Even if he couldn't, there were worse things he could become that the slave of a rich aristocrat. * than the His smirk widened to a smile and he leaned against the wall contentedly as he realized that if he had it to do all over again, he wouldn't change a thing. *had to do it all ch 19 Raythe let his gaze land on Katan's hand. "Have to rough him up a little?" * had to rough ? I'll have some of my best agents look into, Katan. Don't worry, we'll get to the bottom of this before anyone gets hurt…again." *into it "Are you sure, Master? You've not eaten anything all day, I'm worried for your health." *worried about? your health "He's drained, I don't imagine he'll last another 24 hours before he gives. *gives in "Control? That boy, that young, sobbing, frightened,boy is not thinking about controlling anyone. He's too scared that I wouldn't forgive him!" Katan snapped. *hotmail codes + either "he was too scared" or "i won't forgive him" i guess =/ "And when he's had time to calm down and reflect on his training, he'll see that his Master has buttons, that when pushed, make him ignore rules he's previously set. You've set that slave up to be a spoiled brat." *, will make him ignore + hotmail codes When Mark came to me, he was broken, but he was young, and with much work I was able to save him. His devotion, his love comes from a misguided place. It's a lingering remnant of his fragmented soul." * hotmail code No, I'm really just tired still." *No, I'm still just really tired. Voilaaaa ^___^. I hope this helps.
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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2010 14:55 CST
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Im still a reader my bloved ather ^-^. lol. I cought up to your corrent chapter. I love the story but please don't brake Jason. Katan is still super awsome and I just love him. Qeution, can slaves love get married or something? it waould mack seince but it would suck. ill try to keep up so i can tell you what i think.
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Reviewed By: Caysuna [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2010 14:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is becoming very intriguing... more and more in fact. The characters are becoming increasingly interesting... I look forward to the next update ^.^
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Reviewed By: AngelicDevil [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2009 18:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
words elude me except for the fact that i'm in love with it!!!!!!!!!!!! =)
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Title: Amazing!!!!!!
Reviewed By: yuukichan101 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2009 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh wow this is the best fanfic i've ever read. it is absolutly amamzing! *hence the title* i was looking online for something fun to read and then this :D i'm so awed over totally looking forward to the next chapter :)
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Title: Fantasic!!
Reviewed By: Caysuna [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2009 02:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*comes out of the shadows XD* This, is by far the BEST original Yaoi story I have read online!! I can't wait to see the next update! *Yea I was one of the hidden stalkers XD*
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Reviewed By: Maiden's Slave [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2009 13:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I just read your stpry today, and i'm in locve with it. Now i'm waiting for the next chapter and i'm so excited. Your story has brought many ideas to my brain. My way of writing and telling is a story is, me trying to get to the point as fast as possible. Where you take the time and let the story unfold very slowly. I envy you!!!
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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2009 18:36 CDT
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Wow Yuli had a hell of a beating. So aare we geting in to the mager plot. I feel drama coming alonge. Update soon.
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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2009 20:58 CDT
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Awww Katan worried. Jason stubran he might supries her. n thanks for the words of wisdom. n i hop you work out the kinks of your story soon
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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2009 13:12 CDT
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chapter14- Jason needs to lern a batter stress relife. chapter15- i feel bad for jason i hom that lady isn't too hard on him. katan had it rufe though. thanks for the tid bit on katan'sw past it helps me understand him a littal more. if you keep updateing this story once a week i wouldn't mine you haveing another story out. im try to keep up but i just started college and its a pain. but ill always revew when i read. ^-^
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Reviewed By: Deangelised [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2009 15:19 CDT
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Raythe moved his rook, and reached out to massage the back of Jason's neck as Katan made his move." Extra quotation mark! Haha, twas so funny when Jason got checked out! And oh dear, getting compared to a dog like that...hahaha for a moment there Jason sounded bipolar with his sudden mood swing, and I guess he really frayed Katan's nerves hahaha, but I still love Katan *hearts*. ^___^ I wonder how he's going to get out of this one now. Oh! And idk why but I never imagined Raythe to be such a character! I was imagining him more...of the mischievous type I guess, someone with a sharper personality and an edge..*shrugs*
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