| "Lies, Letters, and Calloused Fingertips." Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] |
Reviewed By: kmn1829 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2010 22:49 CDT
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Pleaseeee updateeeee soooooooonnnnnnnn I luvv this story and I wanna kno wats gonna happen. Does inuyasha kno kagomes prego? I guess not if he's still on tour. Is she gonna tell him? He's gonna b mad wen he finds out tht she passd out was in the hospital nd everything nd no1 told him nd now she's 8/9 weeks prego w| twins nd she still hasn't told him! He's gonna b so pissd nd I cnt wait 4 tht chapter 2 cum up. Pleasseeeeee update sooonnnn!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: IDoInuyasha31 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2009 00:39 CDT
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whoo, finally said the heck with homework I am catching up on my stories...yours of course being one. Whay was I thinking going back to college for a third degree when I have all these great Inuyasha fanfics to read!!! I loved it, the angst, the plot twist and Of do I love the lemons!!! I am so excited that Kagome is pregant again, II hope this one goes much much better. But Inuyasha needs to get his hot butt home. I to am a Catholic and I love how you had a spider demon to communicate with the pups so early in life...ahh if only somethings were so in real life. I do home Inuyasha gets back soon to take care of Kagome and the pups can't wait for his reactions of not only expecting but two and one quarter-inu and one human, not that it will matter to them Also are we going to get a little more about Ko and that darn gisha (yes, I too am a little miffed at Inuyasha)?
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Reviewed By: kagome 434 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2009 09:45 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Cant wait for the next chapter so plz update when you can good job!!!!
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Title: ch. 5
Reviewed By: kai999 On: September 18, 2009 08:47 CDT
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ok so i'm reviewing again. I got to ch. 5 and I feel like there are some improvements. You provide more detail and the story doesn't feel as rushed (probably because you were in a hurry to get to this part of the story). the weird thing is, the pov seems so odd...i just can't imagine inuyasha noticing details about Rin and her daughters' and everyone elses kimonos. and how he remembers every hairstyle and describes them is very out of character. I think i may take a break from this story and after you've written more chapters I'll try again. good luck, and keep writing!
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Title: hmmm
Reviewed By: Kai999 On: September 18, 2009 08:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
My biggest pet peeve about this fic is the random songs throughout it. that being said, i really like your plot. it's creative and you could do a lot with it. Some parts feel a bit rushed and i think you could explain somethings better, butjust keep writing and it will come easier! I'll keep reading for now, the story is interesting enough to keep my attention even if i have to scroll through all the lyrics.
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Reviewed By: erinnight [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2009 01:18 CDT
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Darn it! When's that damn charge cord supposed to be there for your laptop! Lol, stupid Toshiba! Hurry it up! I wanna read that dang intermission already! Love ya!
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Reviewed By: IDoInuyasha31 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2009 21:58 CDT
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I haven't read any of the reviews, I tend to not until I finish a fic cause everyone is different...but I am really enjoying the story. I can somehow see Inuyasha as a musician. I'm sure that some of the flames are from the fact that Inuyasha didn't remain faithful, as it was, to Kagome, yes that got me upset but the way you are explaining it has lessen my gasps. I can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: singer97 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2009 22:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is really good continue it please i've never been interested in history inuyasha but you make it good so keep on and finish it peace,singer97
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Reviewed By: kittypaws182 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2009 23:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ohh how interesting now i have to find out what his last name is great job on the story by the way very interesting cant wait till u update
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2009 03:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked that chapter. You wrote very well. Looking forward to next chapter.
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Reviewed By: nicluv1787 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2009 19:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow your writing style is beautiful the first two chapters gave me chills they were so wonderfully romantic, I think this is a really intersting plot I'm interested to see what happened with this giesha, dont worry about flamers some people just feel the need to voice what they think and it's not always what we want to hear, dont give up though I'm really enjoying this story you're doing a great job.
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2009 14:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story. I did have one question. Why wasn't Inuyasha waitig for her at the well when she came back the last time? I'm thinking maybe I missed something. I think you are doing a great job. I'm really looking forward to your next update. Can't wait to hear what Inuyasha has to say for himself.
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Reviewed By: bettychan On: July 11, 2009 11:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooh. Now we're getting to the good part. I can't wait for the next chapter. I believe this fic flows rather nicely. I got the impression that both Inuyasha and Kagome were upset at the miscarriage. But the miscarriage isn't the focal point of the story, the geisha thing is. I felt you put the miscarriage in as background so that we know more of where each is coming from during the rest of the story. Because our past shapes how we handle things in the present and future. Am I wrong? As for why Inuyasha didn't look for Kagome, maybe if you somehow incorporated a small scene where Inuyasha explains that to Kagome would satisfy some people. Overall, a very nice story. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2009 00:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
But why isn't inuyasha upset about losing the baby? Why didn't he go looking for kagome? she is his mate after all. He knew where she lived. He could've watched over her untill her quest was over then he could've been with her. The story makes no sense at all. Okay. That being said. Keep writing. I do not want you to stop. You'll get better with practice. ^_^
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2009 22:43 CDT
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...no... all of the stories ive found lately... they dont live up to expectation... the title caught my attention, so good job... the summery drew me in, perfect... first chapter we find out kagome lost her baby... thats not all, but thats what im focusing on... anywho, kagome lost her baby, and we have two seconds to cry about it... we didnt feel her pain, we didnt wallow in her self pity... you raped that moment... and its only gets worse... because appearantly inu yasha, who just found his mate after hundreds of years isnt happy, at all... ok, i get that, maybe he thinks she left him on purpose... but then he finds out that the child he thought would be there, isnt... and first he thinks she got rid of it... which i dont understand at all, but thats writers privilege, you get to choose your characters personality, so ill give you that... but he wasnt sad? did i mention that hes been alone for hundreds of years with only the vision of his child, because apparently he thinks his mate left him, only to find out that there is no child... and hes not upset... at all? the despair that needs to radiate from that first chapter alone should be epic... beyond comparison, with just a hint of hope at the end... instead we get crap... or what equates to crap anyway... simply put, it needs work... so good luck... hope it gets better...
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Title: Hello
Reviewed By: deathlord86 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2009 15:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just found your fanfic. I love it. Great job! Keep up on it too. I want to find out what happens.
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Reviewed By: bettychan On: July 08, 2009 15:24 CDT
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So far, so good. I can't wait for chapter four. Please update as soon as you can.
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