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| "Fragments" Reviews/Comments [ 30 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2010 10:12 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All right, Sango! I'm a little sad that it's turned out Kohaku really is dead, but I understand if that was the direction you had always been planning on taking this. I do feel the same relief she does that at least all of the unknowns have finally been answered, and in the end, her own mental health is better for it. At least she finally knows the truth, about her brother, and about her (ex)fiance. Now as she has to do is realize that Miroku really wasn't using her. Deep in her heart, she knows the truth there, as well.
| Title: Chapter 7: Finding Beauty in Negative Spaces
Reviewed By: Eikyuu Kosai Awards [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2010 21:53 EST
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Congratulations! Your fic has been nominated for Best Lemon at Eikyuu Kosai, the Miroku/Sango Fandom Awards. Established in 2009, this group strives to recognize those outstanding pieces of fanfiction and art from the Inuyasha universe, which put special emphasis on the Mir/San pairing. Twice a year, our members come together to nominate and vote in 17 different categories, including a special 'Hidden Treasure' award, for those gems that might have been missed the first time around. To learn more about Eikyuu Kosai, please visit http://community.livejournal.com/mirsanawards/ Our current slate of nominations (and the nominee banner) can be found here: http://community.livejournal.com/mirsanawards/15221.html Nominations run from January 1 - January 14th, 2010, with voting from January 18 - January 31st, 2010. Congratulations once again, and please feel free to join in the proceedings! **Please note: you may receive this notification multiple times on the same fic, if it has been nominated into different categories.**
| Title: WHOA
Reviewed By: paynesgrey On: December 17, 2009 15:02 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Of course I came here to read the lemon. I loved it! So hot, and also sensual and tender too. It's been awhile since I read really well-done IY smut like this. Fantastic work.
| Reviewed By: ladygriddlebone [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2009 09:03 EST
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I always face "morning after" stories (or chapters) with some amount of trepidation. It's a difficult subject to write well, but you've pulled it off magnficently with this chapter. You've definitely exceeded all my expectations, and then some (seriously, stop worrying about disappointing anybody - you're doing BEYOND fine with this pairing). I can't say enough how much I love your portrayal of Kuranosuke, in particular, here. It's very like him to try to rise above the situation, to simply not acknowledge the other man at all rather than make a scene or lower himself to fighting or (visible) jealousy. I'm glad that you didn't follow through with a lot of the cliches people tend to use for scenes like this; as always, this story manages to remain fresh and interesting even while covering material that might otherwise be only typical. I think that what I'm looking forward to the most in the coming installments is watching Sango come to terms with her actions, and the new side of herself she's revealed. "This isn't who I am. I don't lie. I don't cheat." That's going to be a tough one for her to deal with. I can only hope she'll let someone back in, be it Miroku or Kuranosuke or even Akiko, to help her realize that she does deserve happiness after all the sorrow in her life.
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2009 03:58 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, we all knew it was coming, but that doesn't make it any easier, does it? But sometimes goodbye is a second chance, so I can only hope that Sango realizes she deserves to be happy before it's too late. Of course, it's never really too late, but if she realizes it before actually getting married to that dick it'll make things a whole lot easier. Really looking forward to the next chapter! Well done!
| Reviewed By: Fireserpent14 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2009 17:24 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy god, it's getting interesting! I want to compliment you on your writing style, you always manage to put feelings onto paper in such an incredible way that I feel like I'm standing over the scene watching it, not reading. You're writing is so good I can create a perfect movie in my head, the way everyone should be able to with a book. If it's poorly written, you might like the plot, but looking back, you weren't seeing or feeling what was happening to the characters, you were staring at a white piece of processed tree with ink scribbles on it, and you work is no where near that. Well done!
| Reviewed By: Griddlebone On: November 17, 2009 12:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I finally found the time to sit down and read this... First off, I'd like to commend you on the tone of the piece, because - holy cow. You've done an amazing job capturing what Sango's feeling, in a way that most authors can't (or don't even attempt), and without getting too far into her head and forcing your readers through the tedium of every thought. The descriptions are so lush and exquisite, and, as a reader, you can FEEL the strength and allure of her connection with Miroku. It's beautiful. I particularly loved the scene where she told him about the scar on her back. And the kiss... perfect. I've never read a description of a kiss that so far transcended the normal awkward and silly prose people use to describe such things, but you managed to write a really believable and captivating kiss here. As you moved into the actual lemon scene, I was a bit worried about how it would all fit... There's a delicate power balance here, between what Sango wants and Miroku taking advantage of a woman lost to despair, but you managed it perfectly. It was tasteful and sweet and hot all that the same time, and definitely delivered the warm fuzzies by the end. I'm looking forward to seeing the repercussions of all this.
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2009 02:30 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved the new chapter, and I loved your nod to Seether in the title. So many songs from that album could fit the emotions you've portrayed here. I do worry what will happen if the (ex?) fiancé happens upon Miroku in her room, but that's an issue for the next chapter. Right now, we'll let them have their moment of happiness. I would also like to add that it's very clear indeed what draws each character to the other, especially given Miroku's somewhat cliché profession. It's so simple, really. They are each other's soul mate. When you meet your soul mate, you just know…no explanation is required. I think you've portrayed that beautifully with the way you've had them unquestionably drawn to each other from the moment they met.
| Reviewed By: ardy1_unlogged in On: October 01, 2009 14:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
If I were a member of the association, your story would have my vote. That said, what isn't clear with either character is what draws one to the other over everyone else. While it would seem that Miroku's ability to listen and make Sango feel her worries are perfectly reasonable and appropriate are the key (fitting nicely with canon), that alone doesn't quite cut it, at least from my perspective. Bartenders are notoriously good listeners, after all. Likewise, as a bartender, Miroku is in a position to meet many lovely women with hard-luck tales; what distinguishes Sango from all the rest? I'd like to see some of what makes these characters so distinctive in canon appear here (hard to do, I know, but I can't help thinking it would up the credibility factor here). I do like this story a lot, though. Miroku as bartender has many of the same somewhat questionable propensities as Miroku the amorous monk - in perhaps more forgiving circumstances. Sango the student anxious to heal her broken family also fits canon, given her guilt regarding her responsibility for her brother's abduction. And while it feels a bit neurotically obsessive, well, so does canon Sango. Less convincing is the Takeda family's willingness to feed Sango's obsession, but maybe that will be explained as more than the son's devotion to her later on (it is the reality that the father is providing most of this support that is questionable, since when have fathers really been willing to do so much for beloved sons when there are so many other 'fish' in the sea?). Looking forward to reading more...
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2009 22:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh wow... Even if that's really true, and Kohaku is dead in your universe for this story, it's still incredibly horrible of her fiancé to honestly expect her to just up and bounce back to "normal" now that she knows the "truth", but something tells me that that "truth" might be a bit skewed. Either way, her fiancé is a bastard, so it's really just a matter of how much of one he is. To either expect his fiancée to forget all about her dead brother to become his wife, or to lie to his fiancée about her dead brother, expecting her to just forget all about him to become his wife. One way means he deserves to have Sango leave his ass, and the other means he deserves to have Miroku kick his ass before Sango leaves it. Can't wait for the next installment!
| Reviewed By: Fireserpent14 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2009 18:23 EDT
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Emotions just went through the roof... wow. Please update soon! I'm waiting for Miroku to beat the living sh*t out of that devil's spawn of a 'loving' fiance!
| Reviewed By: Fireserpent14 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2009 18:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this got so much more into everything, especially emotions! I love it, please update soon!
| Reviewed By: KuroKiku [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2009 18:37 EDT
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It's me again. Please keep on updating; I'd really like to have more of this story to read. ~Kiku~
| Reviewed By: Fireserpent14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2009 01:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon, I love stories like this of Sango and Miroku because you don't find many of them around the site, or they're very hard to find. This was very enjoyable, I look forward to the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: KuroKiku [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2009 22:42 EDT
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This is very enjoyable. I love your style. There's detail, but not so much that the story is overwhelmed by it. I'll certainly keep reading!
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