| "Barriers" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Reviewed By: Hiroto [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2010 11:13 CST
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If you have a sequel planned out, get it up immediately, post-haste, and whatnot. I was starting to think most of your female OCs would be quiet and rather...weakish and subdued, but now that you have Shiki opened to her full powers, I'm itching for more. A word of advice? Don't make all your OCs quiet, well-manneered, polite, and all that. It tends to get rather repetetive and, well, annoying. Editors are also reccommended for the grammatical/mechanical errors. Still, you're one of the better writers I've seen around here, and your stories are intriguing. Keep up the good work. ^^
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Reviewed By: Alicecakes On: February 04, 2010 16:10 CST
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Aww, and here I was reading the last bit of the chapter and hoping you already had a sequel planned out, lol. I had a blast reading and getting to know Shiki. I'll be re-reading it in the future.
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Reviewed By: Randi On: January 08, 2010 21:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's a very good story. I love the plot line. It can be slightly confusing at times, but overall, I like it rather well. Kurama and Shuichi merging is weird, but it could happen I guess. The only real negative is that it could use some more editing grammar wise before posting. It isn't really bad though. Anyway, I find the story to be funny and sometimes suspenseful thus enjoying it. I also hope that you do not write an epilogue. You are right that epilogues tend to cheapen the story in many cases though not always. It depends on how much the epilogue tells and what it says. Anyway, I can't wait to read the rest of when it comes out.
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Reviewed By: Alicecakes On: January 05, 2010 20:22 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww, it's almost over already? D: I'd love an epilogue.
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Title: I'm still reading!
Reviewed By: Alicecakes On: December 01, 2009 02:22 CST
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I really liked this chapter, piqued my curiosity. Can't wait for the update!
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Reviewed By: Alicecakes On: November 17, 2009 20:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Ohhh, cliffy. Good job, I love this fic.
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Reviewed By: buzzk97 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2009 19:06 CST
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Hello! I am glad that you posted so soon! Keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: Sly Vixen706 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2009 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful chapter, keep up the good work! Hope you're feeling well.
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Reviewed By: Sly Vixen706 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2009 23:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incredibly interesting, good job. I'll be reading.
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Reviewed By: buzzk97 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2009 09:50 CDT
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I loved the way you added the few extra lines from Youko at the end of the chapter! I am trying to think if it is an evil glint or a 'hey baby what you doin'? glint. Hmmmm, the jury is still out on that one. I think that there should be a bit of mushiness between Shiki and Kurama. What can I say? I am a sucker for all things mushy. Keep up your awesomeness! Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: Akpixie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2009 11:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loving it! I understand having a busy schedule! lol Update when you can, I will wait patiently!
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Reviewed By: Akpixie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2009 22:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really really like your story! The character development is amazing! You have managed to capture each characters personalities perfectly! I hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: shikon no kouken On: August 22, 2009 06:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good story so far, Keep up the good work. Just a thought, Try to make your character more spontanious?
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