Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2009 05:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ahhhhh! I'm all smiles after reading this again. Sorry it has taken me so long to write up a review! You used an element in this story that I really love by having the blanket tie all the events together through the years. ^_^ Starting from the very beginning, I loved the way you arranged their first meeting. I have read a few fics where Kagome stumbles into the Makai or pops up in a well there, but having her brought there by youkai selling black market humans for dinner was delightfully original. I think you nailed your characterization of Kagome. Her calm demeanor when she first came to in the Makai was very typical of her. She was able to carry on a conversation while she tried to figure out where she was and how she could get away. She never was one to be thrown for a loop when finding herself in strange circumstances. ^_^ I can definitely see her conning the two youkai into letting her hold the bow and arrow. LOL! I really enjoyed the description of Hiei on patrol. I felt like you captured him perfectly through the thoughts of the other "border guards." And Kagome's reactions and self-confidence are just so perfect to catch Hiei's attention. It was obvious she intrigued him right off the bat and astounded him a b it with her quick and easy reading of his character and her trust of him. (I loved the bit about him noticing her legs when she unwrapped the blanket, too. ^_~) The time skips and cute scenes that followed filled out a full picture of how their lives progressed from that unexpected meeting. I loved the naughtiness of the picnic scene when their daughter was conceived! That had me giggling. ^_^ And Hiei's thoughts while Kagome was screaming at him during her labor were wonderful: "Before she went insane, Kagome had said she wanted him there." LMAO! I was really, really, really impressed with the scene of Hiei dealing with his 5-year-old daughter. The way he was trying to manipulate her into giving up the blanket was priceless. "Hiei had learned a trick or two in five years of being a father." I am always intrigued by how people write him as a parent. I think you got it right--no matter how awkward he may be at first, or how stern or how much of a pushover, it is true that he would learn by his experiences. And I really loved the ending you devised for the blanket and the story. Bravo for using the Bon-Odori festival and telling us about sakiori weaving! Having Kagome use the blanket to make an obi for her daughter was just wonderful. I loved how you summed up the story from the perspective of the role the blanket had played in it--as if the blanket was a character. "The blanket had a good, long life with their family." Brilliant! I can't wait to see more stories from you!
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