| "One Half a Wing and a Prayer: Fly me to the Moon" Reviews/Comments [ 27 ] |
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2009 11:59 EST
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Also, the initial section for chapter 1 is now gone. What's up with that?
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2009 11:58 EST
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Neh, fuck the metal, WIELD THE POWER OF ROCK! Still, does the eye glow thing mean Setsuna is a succubus too? An interesting twist, to say the least. In any case, awesome update, after all this time, now if only your other story can be updated too. And it's at such a good point, with the lady and the tiger about to go to the brawl, lmao. Continue to update, ja ne.
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Reviewed By: Lictre On: December 04, 2009 22:16 EST
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Unfortunately, I have to give this a poor review, since it appears that no formatting made it into the page, as it comes across as a block of text with no paragraphs or other distinguishing controls. Block of text fics border on the entirely unreadable. Please re-examine your formatting and correct things.
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Title: Excellent start, except for formatting
Reviewed By: Narsil [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2009 14:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent start to a much-anticipated sequel. I gave a slightly low Originality rating because it's a foundation chapter, just beginning to lay out where things are going, but I don't expect the rating to stay that low, not after the first story (one of the best fanfics I've read, period). For the block-of-text problem, where the line breaks are supposed to be is obvious so I simply copy-and-pasted to Word and used search and replace - made it perfectly readable, no problem at all.
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Title: Formatting plroblem...
Reviewed By: McHunter [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2009 11:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice start, but would be better if it was correct formatted and not one whole block of text... So please fix it.
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Reviewed By: PhiloWorm [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2009 17:31 EDT
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I secon... no, make that tenth that motion... there must be a way to neaten this up.
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Reviewed By: DTeavler On: September 22, 2009 18:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good to see you witting this the only complainant I have is that the format is hard to read other than that it is great keep writing.
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Reviewed By: Megatyrant On: September 19, 2009 10:56 EDT
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Arrghhh... Wall-of-text attack! Did you forget something, or is there another reason for this, well, text-block, being un-divided? Nonetheless, it should be easy to fix. When done, I think I'll have a closer look... :)
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Reviewed By: SpudJebus On: September 17, 2009 11:15 EDT
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been looking forward to this, cant wait to see where the stroy goes
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Title: Finally, it's back!!!
Reviewed By: Tuhali [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2009 00:47 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice beginning. I was wondering when you'd start this up again. Been so long since you finished the first book; was such a big fan of it and couldn't wait for more. The formatting is not what you're used to doing. Maybe you got used to ff.net posting style? Anyways, keep up the good work and post frequently!! XD
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Reviewed By: wolf40k [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2009 20:15 EDT
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I'll come back after you reformat the chapter, and you've made it readable.
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Title: Critic
Reviewed By: avatoa [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2009 16:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Have you ever thought of making paragraphs?
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2009 11:53 EDT
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Hmmm, an interesting start. Still, the black of text issue is rather annoying, the uploader take out all the spaces you put in? Beyond that one issue, the latest story looks like it should be interesting, and hey, bringing back Genma as a serious threat was one of the better ideas in the original story, so that's pretty cool right there. Continue to update, will ya? Ja ne.
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Reviewed By: Annon On: September 16, 2009 11:47 EDT
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There is absolutely no formatting at all. I tried using both IE and Firefox. As it is right now it is basically unreadable.
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Reviewed By: Anonn On: September 16, 2009 11:11 EDT
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---Yo, you need to neaten this up a bit!
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