Reviewed By: Sessh_Lover On: December 28, 2015 07:21 PST
Comment/Review:
This is half flame, half praise. I freaking love this story. I am
so interested in it. I am a new reader to it, and I understand the
struggles of updating in a timely fashion, but it really frustrates
me as a reader that your updates can be so few and far between. I'm
sorry because I know you've taken on really deep and intense
topics, but please give me more to read! Or, make it a bit simpler.
Point of contention: time travel is tricky as hell to deal with,
and it's even messier with the familial bonds you've tied into it.
How is it that no one's run into Naxos in the past? You said early
on that she was roaming around because she got bored with Greece,
came to Japan, and fell in love with it and so stayed. And she's
even been there some centuries ago at the Western Palace. This is a
super messy paradoxical problem because Kagome shouldn't be meeting
her predecessors in the past. Wibbly-wobbly-timey-wimey... stuff.
Honestly, I don't give a shit about Kouga's romantic life. I think
you're incredible at the Sessh/Kag shipping, but I just really
don't care about Kouga's problems. It would have been more
satisfying to me to just leave him out of the sequel, unless you're
planning to write him back into the main storyline later. And at
that point I think you're seriously toying with may more than you
should, especially when updates can be sparse at best. I also
really hate the sections written in the present era. I don't want
these hints as to the shit that happens to Kagome, I just want to
live it with her and Sesshomaru in the feudal era! Both Kouga's
story and the modern era perspective stuff all distract from the
delicious Sessh/Kag moments, and I need more of those!!!!! Don't
remember if I've said this like this yet: I think you've bitten off
more than you can chew. This is such a beautiful story in the
making, but you have so much going on tangent to the main plotline!
Also, it's really hard to start in with a new villain that's so far
super vague when you have Kagome so deeply entrenched in her PTSD.
Give her more fluff and pull her out of it a bit so that there's
more to threaten when the new villain actually comes in fully. All
this being said, I'm absolutely going to continue reading this fic,
and I beg you to update often. I will be extremely angry and sad if
you don't. And my one friend will yell at me to shut up from me
bitching at her about how much I need this story to continue. I'm
trying to wrap up my thoughts and stop this comment, but I keep
thinking of more things I need to say. I only ship Sessh/Kag in
fics, and I think you've done an incredible job with this ship.
Yours is now among my top favorite Sessh/Kag fics I've ever read.
PLEASE CONTINUE THIS FIC AND MAKE MORE FREQUENT UPDATES. I'M
BEGGING YOU.
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