| "Into the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: nan_de_mo_chibi_otoko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2010 04:27 CDT
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how sad... poor sess and wow rin.... hope to see moew :)
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Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2010 22:25 CST
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Hey, chapter 10 and 11 were the same one, I think you accidentally posted it twice. Happened to me once, no worries.
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Title: I forgot to rate it. ^_^
Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2010 00:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol! The rest of the story is pretty good but I'm giving you three nines because of chapter 2. And try to make your chapters longer. I'm still here and I'm still reading your story. So please keep writing.But chapter 2 just erks me. Oh and my intension was never flame you. ^_^
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Title: At least I'm not lying to you.
Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2010 00:34 CST
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I'm just telling the truth. It's too rushed and you made kagome seem like a slut. I could care less if I pissed the person below me off. The whole point in commenting on a story is to help the person write better. I'm blunt and to the point. I'm helping you. You need a relationship to GROW in real life before you have sex. You need that trust in relationships. It's common sense. After they have sex in chapter 2 then you can't build up to Anything! Ever heard of sexual tension? That is what this is going to lack. They weren't making love they where just screwing.This really looked like it would be good...until chapter 2. If anyone does not like what I have to say then too bad. I'm just telling the truth.
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren1 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2009 02:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your story is very good. I don't know about you, but that reviewer pissed me off. This is your story. Write it the way you want to. I wouldn't take her words to heart, because it is only her opinion. My opinion on this is if you don't like it THEN DON'T READ IT.....Personally I am looking forward to your next update.
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2009 02:01 CDT
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Okay....chapter 2 is too soon for a lemon!!! You have to at least let their relationship grow!! This could've been good too! The characters have to mature through the story. This is just a fuck story...get rid of chapter 2 and let sesshoumaru and kagome do something else BESIDES HAVE SEX! A date would be nice. But you must build up to a lemon. If you make a long story it should be in the middle. If it short then at least get them on a couple of dates first.
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