| "The Miko's Love" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: can_u_c_me On: December 21, 2009 20:15 CST
Comment/Review:
I like the storyline and the way you make tem connect. HOWEVER(some constructive critisismcoming up) the story is moving to quickly. The characters are also not in their character. You should slow the story down and give the characters a better build up. Otherwise, they won't be as realistic.(This is a great element to use when you plan on adding a lemon. Readers will probably feel closer to the characters as well). Lastly, you need more detail when describing their feelings, what their doing, what they look like etc. I love the story! Keep up the hard work!
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Reviewed By: kagomaruLover88 On: December 11, 2009 20:06 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Comment/Review:
This story is short sweet and to the point. It's cute and I like it. Thank you for writing a good FanFic! Love, KagomaruLover88
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Reviewed By: Kags521 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2009 22:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it! so far so good...UPDATE SOON!
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