| "Choices" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: vayne [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2010 08:51 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found this in Sueric's forum. You stated that you want a brutally honest assessment so I'll attempt to give one. I hope you wont get discouraged because that is not my intention. I rarely give reviews so this is really something. Story-wise: this storyline is very well-used. Maybe you could make a fresh plot twist that will make people squirm to read the next chapter. Grammar and spelling: there are some but a beta-reader could probably solve that for you. Pace: I find some of the scenes too abrupt. Maybe you can play with words to make them express more depth and meaning for your story. Remember, you are portraying feelings and not just faces. Let your reader feel what they are feeling, and see and hear and surmise the whole scene. We have to feel like we are there too. I hope this review helps you!
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2010 15:57 CST
Comment/Review:
AAAAWWWEEEE! Those bakas!
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2010 11:57 CST
Comment/Review:
Haha, I like being recognized =] That was a good update! I feel so sorry for Kagome, and I'm not sure what I think about Mizuki yet, but we'll see! Catch ya later, gator!
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2009 18:44 CST
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I'm absolutely sure that Miroku & InuYasha looked freaking sexy in their modern clothes, especially those jeans...
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2009 17:18 CST
Comment/Review:
...whoa...
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2009 16:42 CST
Comment/Review:
OH WOW!!!!!!!!! I like it a lot! Updaet soon please!
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