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| "Motoko's Secret" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: anon123456 On: March 30, 2010 00:55 CDT
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This was kind of a cute reading. Thank you. :)
| Reviewed By: tea133zen On: March 27, 2010 13:41 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A nice easy read. I think you managed to capture the slapstick comedy and fanservice of the series and the characters seemed true to canon. Keitaro soaks up punishment he doesn't deserve, Motoko struggles between samurai training and femininity, Naru denies feelings she isn't comfortable with and Kitsune eggs them on for amusement's sake. I didn't see any jarring grammatical errors and you didn't have any huge blocks of text(thank you for that). The underwear model deal at the end was a good laugh (reminded me of the Ane Doki manga) and Suu managing to find edible underwear stretches things a little, but still funny as a gag. I hope you'll keep on writing more. :)
| Reviewed By: t0k0 On: February 26, 2010 13:45 CST
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c'mon man do you really have TO FOLLOW ME TO MEDIAMINER?! best of luck to yeh
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