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| "The sealing of fates" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: raven2010 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2010 10:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE YOUR STORY IT"S AWESOME. I love the part where Kagome say's InuYasha I gotta pee that's freakin hilarious. I gotta say I just knew that she was gonna be pregnant after that week. THANK YOU YOUR A GREAT WRITER
| Reviewed By: ScifiAmy (not signed in) On: March 17, 2010 21:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
Nice job.
| Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2010 16:30 CST
Comment/Review:
It's funny how sometimes what makes you leave a comment has little to do with the story you just read. I do agree with SplendentGoddess, that a beta is not necessary if you do your own proofreading. But I have read so many fanfics with bad spelling, bad grammar and tons of missing words, that I automatically correct things in my head now while reading them. Which is not to say that I wouldn't prefer not to do that. And again I agree with SplendentGoddess that the Inuyasha smells the pregnancy is such a commonly overused theme that is as much a part of fanfic cannon as mating marks, and inu youkai mating for life. What I do draw issue with is you stating that because you have kids and your beta didn't you automatically know more. Personally I've met lots of people with kids that were utterly clueless, and I've met teenagers with vast amounts of knowledge. And by the way, the blastocyst embryo takes about five days not two after fertilization before implanting into the uterine wall, but hey what do I know, I don't have kids.
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2010 23:53 CST
Comment/Review:
I don't blame you for not wanting a beta after all of your bad experiences, especially over something like Inuyasha smelling Kagome get pregnant, because that scenario has been used to death in the fandom, so you should hardly take the heat for using such a cliche plot device. On the other hand, I don't think you should just 'accept' your bad grammar and/or spelling for what it is. I don't use a beta, either, but I proofread my stuff over and over (and over) again before posting...still with the occasional error, I know, but I'm only human. There were a lot of errors in this that makes me wonder how much you really care about your writing; stupid little things that I refuse to believe you're unaware of. That being said, I was fully aware of the fact that your story would contain errors going in, as per your warning, so I read through until the end, anyway. While it was a recycled concept, it's getting to the point where just about any concept has been used a few times before, and I think that all in all - errors not withstanding - this was a good story. I would encourage you, not to get a beta, but to show more pride in your work by endeavoring to prove that you don't need a beta. You are quick to defend your knowledge regarding female biology, which shows some measure of pride in your stories already, so let that translate into other areas. I look forward to seeing additional work from you in the future.
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