| "Kagome's Trust" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: I don't know how to feel.
Reviewed By: Conflicted_Reader On: November 06, 2015 06:07 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this thing all the way through. Even when people told me to
just quit. The story was intriguing. I think that you have some
great ideas, but that you took on WAY too many plot points for one
fic. A collection of smaller, related fics would have been much
better, as well as allowed you to further explore the various
sub-plots. It was also very frustrating to see so much repeated
language throughout the fic. I would love to read more about some
of these characters in more carefully written detail. Often, though
this fic was definitely long, the various plot points seemed
extremely brief and as if only an overview was given on the
stories. You may also want to take greater care with planning out
your plot points, because I was often left banging my head on the
walls around me with the nonsense that was coming from the rushed
feeling of the story, as well as how incredulous several of the
story turns were. I think you bit off WAY more than you could chew
for a first fic. But that being said, this was fairly impressive
given that circumstance. Keep working at it, and please think
through everything more thoroughly and make sure your details are
consistent and agree logically and enough time is spent fleshing
out each portion. If there are questions left about what the heck
is going on, you need to explain it better so that it makes perfect
sense or take it out all together. It's for this main reason that I
suggest a series of related stories that are definitely separate so
that you can give each story the proper amount of attention.
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Reviewed By: Azn_Tofu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2010 14:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i want to read more !!! eeep im so excited and i cant wait. hhhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmmm please update soon ^^
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Reviewed By: Azn_Tofu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2010 14:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i want to read more !!! eeep im so excited and i cant wait. hhhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmmm please update soon ^^
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Title: MORE
Reviewed By: nuttyginger1 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2010 12:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DO MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: wynterfrost1 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2010 09:30 PDT
Comment/Review:
I love this story please update soon I wanna know how kagome will react to shessy I'm glad she knows he has no idea about her kids and I know naraku will cause problems keep up the great story.......
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