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| "The Alchemy of Gold and Silver" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: Jade_LightningWolf On: June 27, 2010 19:14 CDT
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A fantastic finish. I must say that you wove the original elements of the story into the finale quite well, including one of my personal favorite scenes (the Jineh fight.) You did an excellent job of capturing characters naturally, and your writing flows. I look forward to your next work. And I must confess that Kaoru's ougi made me laugh out loud. The name was...a slight anachronism, but fitting.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2010 20:40 CDT
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Hmmm, point there. Still, I do love the ending (though is Shishio really dead? Always a question with that man, unless you see him burn to ashes) but the romance of Kaoru and Kenshin was very well handled. The only real reason that Tokyo and not Kyoto was chosen as the home to canon was either because of historical context (the school of swordsmanship Kaoru taught might have originated there) or to have given Kenshin a life away from that bloody battlefield, one he would not want to live in after all he suffered there. Still, Soujiro getting to live is pretty awesome (him dying of TB or some other disease in the anime backstory pretty much sucked) but hey, it is a good story, and a pretty nice ending to the tale. As such, continue to update, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2010 21:15 CDT
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You replaced chapter 3 with an update of your blind miko naruto fanfic. Which is an interesting story too, but it's not kenshin! In any case, please correct this. Update again soon, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: Jade_LightningWolf On: June 07, 2010 01:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just want to thank you for taking an overdone idea and making it new and refreshing again. Additionally, you write vividly and your chapters are grammatically correct (something quite difficult to find, it seems.) I'm truly looking forward to the rest of this story because I believe you'll be able to preserve the spirit of the series while still making the characters and story your own. I particularly love the way you've written Kaoru. Her spirit shines beautifully in the pages.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2010 09:41 CDT
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And thus it begins. Apparently no invincible ship to destroy a major port, but directly to the final battles. As such, it's a pretty interesting chapter, if to just set the scene. Again, update again soon, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2010 23:07 CDT
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Hey, every chapter we get is damnably amazing to read. As such, continue to update will ya? Update again soon, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2010 12:53 CDT
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Hmmm, the first for his uncertainty, the second for deciding to be a protector then? Heh, definitely will be interesting. Of course that still leaves the vacuum cutter guy, and the thunder dude before the larger arcs. Hmmm, guess the days in Kyoto are almost over, leaving the days of journeys, neh? In any case, continue to update will ya? Ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2010 21:49 CDT
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Good to be heard from then. Of course the effects of this latest storyline is an interesting one. Is this the same man from Samurai X that gave Kenshin the scar, or another with a different intent? One of the main points originally was that the scar was made by someone filled with regrets; but the second scar over it was that the girl was satisfied with what she had to do, and wanted to remind him of what Kenshin had done, and would always be reminded of it. Still, it is a good update, and one more worth reading. The title change did throw me for a minute, but the explanation is a fair one. Maybe it is too complex a story name, but hey, it's your work. The only issue I'd have with it is that someone might think it was for Full Metal Alchemist. In any case, continue to update, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2010 23:08 CDT
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Hmmm, several important parts of this story of course are gonna come up. The reveal on traitors, and being sent to the countryside with his "wife" is one thing Kenshin had to do in Samurai X, but where will the story go with a far greater involvement by the Oniwaban-shishio? Not to mention Shishio and his 10 man band? Still, seeing Kenshin in full Batousai mode and questioning it, that's one of the better arts to the story so far. To write a pacifist is easy, to write a transition into a pacifist, from an assasin? Far, far harder, and done quite well so far. In any case, definitely looking forward to the next chapter. So, update again soon, neh? Ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2010 20:00 CDT
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WEEE, we get to meet the Oniwabansho next! Weee! Kekekeke, it's so much fun seeing Aoshi be serious, and then get henpecked by the old man. In any case, gonna enjoy reading the next update. Update again soon, je ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2010 23:52 CDT
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Again, an interesting chapter. Not sure where it's going from here, but interesting none the less. Continue to update will ya? Ja ne.
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