| "Kiss and Control" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: Vivacious!
Reviewed By: Zakirya On: July 12, 2011 18:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome pairing b/w Byakyuya and Rangiku! Love it! I hope you continue this fantastic fic! |
Reviewed By: LZ On: July 08, 2010 15:56 EDT
Comment/Review:
Yes, an update! I like how you dipict Byakuya as still being in control but as he struggles to gauge his emotions with regards to matsumoto, we begin to see a slow break down in confidence. Unsettling for him, fun for us to read. Keep it up, you're doing well.
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Reviewed By: lil jynx [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2010 15:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like how you write and form your sentences. Unlike myself, you grammar and spelling are excellent but i think that u are getting too technical with the story. Say what you need to say without getting too schematical about it. Also, sometimes it sounds like the lieutenants are slaves. lol. But keep writing, i've been waiting for this chapter for months now.
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Reviewed By: LZ On: April 04, 2010 21:39 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hmmm Normally I am a die-hard Bya/Rukia fan, but this story has intrigued me. Please do continue.
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Title: Re: Kiss and Control
Reviewed By: lil jynx [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2010 13:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The reason i gave the enjoyment factor a seven is simply because while your story intruges and captures the imagination, the chapter is far too long. My brain is swimming with multiple scenarios and information that i fear i will loose if i dont get to read the next chapter immediately. Next time, please for the reader, try to limit one general idea to a chapter... PLEASE.... But awesome story though. Just favorited you....
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2010 14:27 EDT
Comment/Review:
Huh Byakuya and Ran? Interesting and I like how you're building it up. Let's see where this one goes. ... Just ah, don't forget about Friend and Different. ;P
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