Reviewed By: Goshibuh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2010 23:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was good. It could use improvement, but it wasn't bad. You have a lot of grammar mistakes, but those can be fixed :] I also had a problem with the color of the font. It was different, and I'm sure that's probably why you did it, but it made it hard to read, and at first glance, I didn't think, "Oh, this story looks fun.", and it didn't make me want to read it more...Like how changing the color of the paper a test is printed on might make it more appealing...I almost didn't read it actually, because of the color. Those are just my opinions, I'm not you so I don't know why you made it pink/purple. In any case, it was good, but it could be improved :]
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