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| "Shakujou to Hiraikotsu" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: ardy1 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2010 17:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is astonishing how well you write porn. You get perfectly the balance between physical stimulation and that spiritual element that elevates a sexual experience to something that celebrates love. All the while not forgetting that a good fuck has value, too. I think that Miroku would be humble before his wife's purity before their marriage, and that humility would survive the birth of their children. I also think that Sango's physical nature would rise to appreciate the gift of expertise her husband brought to their union, and respect your take on her aggressiveness in that aspect of their relationship. It makes sense that she would need to dominate in order to make up for her relative lack of experience, and since she was always the gate-keeper it also makes sense that he would respect that need for dominance. Your writing is lovely. The sex is maturely presented, thoughtful, and yet sensual. Good job!
| Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2010 11:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was really good. I'd love to see more, you pique my interest about Kagome being jealous. I'd like to see you delve into that because it seems strange she'd be jealous of Sango.
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