| "The Night of No Regrets" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Reviewed By: Vega Obscura The King [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2002 18:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
NICE JOB SO FAR!! |
Reviewed By: Pheonix On: October 20, 2002 18:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you kick ass toots. i must say that the way your mind works is very cool and killing goten and having veg. bring him back was brilliant. keep it up babe and please keep it comming!! |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: September 09, 2002 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i cant wait for the next edition!
hurry up but do it right!
and dont worry about spelling you are a college student for crying out loud c.students cant spell.
keep it comming babe! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"I...."he began as a soft whisper, "are you ashamed of me... of us? You tell me that you love me and that you want no other; yet you still don't want anyone to know. It hurts it really does...
Now, she was such a hypocrite. After all that.... why did she still want to keep silent. Oh yeah she wanted everyone to be happy. Happiness came at such a high price, and Goten was worth any price.
*sigh* I hate to admit it, but ... this conversation is familiar to me. I truly emphasize with Bra and her regret. But ... I could never go through with fulfilling the request. However, my situation was a TAD different. My parents DO know that we're going out but ... let's just say, they don't want me to LIMIT myself. Hn. This from parents who broke up because of infidelity. Good greif.
What is he doing here? Is he proving another one of his points? Bra had no idea. He father seemed sinister. . . . No, her father was up to something, and she was afraid.
Reminds me of my dad's little ... training sessions. Heh. Well, at least he wanted me to know how to defend myself. Vegeta is scary at times. Right now he's just an overprotective father. Still, I can't help but worry for Bra.
"Yes far too much... You're perfect hair is somewhat disheveled around your neck and ears. Your lips seemed redder more full. That tells me that you've been with someone. Thankfully from the smell it was a man." he laughed in his evil way, "that's good but not good for him. Tell me brat who is that you wish to hide from me?"
Heh. Veggie's evil laugh. He's so observant and almost smart, ne? Vegeta the detective (hm). Never figured Veg for a homophobe (except in Goku's case, lol:) but then ... a woman NOT needing men probably would scare even him (hmm). lol ... Vegeta, the bloodhound (hmmm). I feel sorry for Bra and Goten ... this is DEFinately not the best way for Veggieboy to find out.
Bra had no idea what he was doing she just looked at the hole in her ceiling with her brow furrowed. Then it hit her. He smelled Goten on her and was heading straight for him.
O.O Eeek!! Someone's in for an ASS whoopin!! Trust me ... they'll ALL be laughing about that hole later ...WAY later. UnLESS, Vegeta smelled the wrong guy!! *lol* As if Veg's nose is ever wrong ... or is it? SO.... what's Veggie gonna do? Uh..... stalk him? (I KNOW what you did to my daughter) Or .... challenge him to a fight? (If you can beat me, THEN you can have her). *lol* I used to expect MY dad to do one of those ... if not BOTH! LMAO!! ^_^
I feel like I'm standing in front of a firing squad. *gulp* Sorry for the extra long, lacking in cookie taste, and still very pointless review ... -_- |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: August 13, 2002 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT'S SO COOL! I LOVE WHEN VEG. KILLS NOT SO MUCH IN A LOVE STORY BUT IM A FREAK AND I LIKE IT WHEN THINGS DONT TURN OUT LIKE THEY ARE SUPPOST TO |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: August 13, 2002 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I CAN PICTURE MY DAD FREAKING OUT JUST LIKE VEG.
AND IT S NOT PRETTY. THIS IS A VERY COOL CHAP. AND I CAN'T WAIT TO READ THE NEXT! GOOD JOB! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Whoo hoo! An update!! :) Alright, you conviced me. This chapter was worth it (though I previously argued the importance of it), and I am definately looking forward to future chapters!
"G, she's my baby sis. I trust you with her. I really do, but if you break her heart I will kill you wish you back and let dad have at you." *blinks* LMAO!!! That's one's so good, I may quote you for life ... (:
LOL I think Goten gave Trunksie some BAD ideas about being with a Saiyan ... heh heh. AH! I'm Trunks and I'm horrified ... but was it really that good? "...ladies first..." That's it, I've heard enough! ... LMAO!!
FYI ... those are just SOME of the reasons why the new chappies are really great (hint hint;), and I say you MUST continue this story! ^_^ And yes, dammit, your "great ideas" for Vegeta's reactions (hehehe) DID add to my opinion ... a little. ^_~ |
Reviewed By: SSVegeta5 On: August 13, 2002 14:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man i loved this fic.I read Bra and Goten fics all the time but WOW this one is my all time favorite.Man I can't wait till you continue.Man i loved it.You are awsome. |
Reviewed By: Pheonix On: August 12, 2002 15:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was very cool, if only my bro was as considerate! i can't wait to see the next issue! |
Reviewed By: Pheonix On: August 12, 2002 15:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story was so kick ass. i mean it was just so spiffy! i was blown away, because i have known the author for a long time and-damn! i never knew she could write like this. Although she needs to re-read before submission for any editorial mistakes-lol! but Damn! |
Reviewed By: silvershadow On: August 11, 2002 22:28 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The fic is going well i think even though the mystery is gone. That's what made the first chap so great |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2002 21:40 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
lol, I never realized there weren't that many Goten/Bra stories ... this one's my first. ^_^
I admit, I'm not much of a Trunks/Pan fan, so when I started reading this I believed they'd be the couple just to piss me off. j/k
The first chapter of this fic was QUITE addictive. (hehhehheh) The way you NEVER told who the characters were was SUCH a hook. I need more of that coolenss!! Um ... the ideas sound pretty good. The Trunks talking to Goten and Pan talking to Bra idea is predictable and should EVENtually be written. But ... maybe Bulma walking in on them would be a little TOO much (although it sounds fun;). The crumpled up towel inquisition sounds funny.
Btw, now that I know Pan's a Garbage fan I actually think she's pretty cool. Push it ROCKS!! Oh wait, you said that was Static X. LMAO ... I feel so uncool. :(
Write more on this fic, because it's actually quite good. But ... I need my couples to overcome obstacles/struggles. SOMEthing bad's got to happen, right? sheesh, I'm such a drama monguer ... ^_~ |
Reviewed By: silvershadow On: August 08, 2002 22:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm glad Trunks didn't kill Goten, but it was classic when Pan slugged him? As a Trunks and Pan fac i forgive you for the comment, but you should make it up to all of us some how.
I think Goten and Bra need some alone time.
Hope you update soon. |
Reviewed By: voidsenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2002 18:41 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
....WOW.... That was not what I was expectiong. I mean it was a great story but the people that I thought it was going to be were different from who you piced. I was expecting it to be Trunks and Pan but I was shocked to find out that it was one of my other fav. couples.... *finnaly snaps out of daze* Sooooooooo yeah!!!!! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!! If ya feel like going on I totaly engourage it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: silvershadow On: August 05, 2002 19:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it I love it! especially they way you didn't tell who it was until the end although there were some good clues! Great job for a first time fic! I hope there will be another chapter telling how the aftermath played out.
If not you should write similar fics with different couples.
All in all great job and mad props! |
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