| "The Night of No Regrets" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Reviewed By: Yuffie lockheart On: January 08, 2003 00:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is great!!
i hope that when your done
u do another story lik this wit Trunks an Pan!! |
Reviewed By: pheonix On: January 02, 2003 22:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
very creative and good
u should write more and study less
just kidding
keep it up babe! |
Reviewed By: pheonix On: January 02, 2003 22:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i like your style |
Reviewed By: DBZ Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2002 18:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What are you talking about you didn't make it all the way through Christmas? You didn't even make it through Christmas Eve! Anyway, great story. I thought that was funny when Pan dragged Trunks out of his room. Was he sparring with her in his pajamas? |
Reviewed By: pheonix On: December 13, 2002 19:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i always knew u were on smack. and the friend time will be an interesting conversation to read cause we all know friends talk about everything and anything there is
good job on the update
u still need to proof read babe but u did quiet well
and i cant wait for the next update |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2002 16:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
*He he he* Trunks and Pan are going to share a room! (I'm wishing for a HUGE snow storm to barracade them in there so they can, uh ... get closer) *smirks* ... oh-that's right, this is a Goten/Bra fic. Sorry, I guess I miss reading about Trunks. -_- (I've been reading mostly V/B's lately and this is always a nice change of pace.)
The only thing that I should mention is that I got a LITTLE confused when they were calling each other by their old nicknames. (They were SUCH funny/cute names!!) I guess I just couldn't tell who was talking. From the names, I could tell who was being called what, but not the person calling them that.
Yeah, poor ChiChi ... she's all alone. *sniffles* But ... her living WITH V/B and the crew?? I don't know about her ... but if I was her and living with Vegeta/Bulma, it would drive me crazy without my Goku. :(
Aww ... it's time for a cuddle/walk. Hey!! It should start snowing on them! *heh* And the woodchopping/male-bonding sounds funny. (someone needs to get a smashed finger/toe!! *lol* j/k It hurts!)
This is still great!! I can't wait for more! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Jess124 On: November 22, 2002 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is your first fic! It's awesome! Hurry with the updates! You should really write some more of this. |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2002 00:10 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*blinks* . . . is it that time of year already??
That's it, you got me in the mood for Christmas-- and it's not even Thanksgiving,yet--it's all your fault!! *lol* j/k
Hm . . . I wonder what was up with the clothes thing? Obviously Pan thought it was weird that Bra was buying clothes for herself WHILE they were Christmas shopping--!! Could Bra be-- O.O *snickers* I think someone's getting a Christmas surprise early this year. And not that it's important,but ... what's with the random date of January 12?? Does it have some important meaning that I just am oblivious too?? OH ... and what was Vegeta's OTHER wish!?!?!
*lol* As you can tell ... I'm STILL hooked. Keep it up!! ^_~ |
Reviewed By: Vega Obscura The King [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2002 18:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
NICE JOB SO FAR!! |
Reviewed By: Pheonix On: October 20, 2002 18:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you kick ass toots. i must say that the way your mind works is very cool and killing goten and having veg. bring him back was brilliant. keep it up babe and please keep it comming!! |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: September 09, 2002 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i cant wait for the next edition!
hurry up but do it right!
and dont worry about spelling you are a college student for crying out loud c.students cant spell.
keep it comming babe! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"I...."he began as a soft whisper, "are you ashamed of me... of us? You tell me that you love me and that you want no other; yet you still don't want anyone to know. It hurts it really does...
Now, she was such a hypocrite. After all that.... why did she still want to keep silent. Oh yeah she wanted everyone to be happy. Happiness came at such a high price, and Goten was worth any price.
*sigh* I hate to admit it, but ... this conversation is familiar to me. I truly emphasize with Bra and her regret. But ... I could never go through with fulfilling the request. However, my situation was a TAD different. My parents DO know that we're going out but ... let's just say, they don't want me to LIMIT myself. Hn. This from parents who broke up because of infidelity. Good greif.
What is he doing here? Is he proving another one of his points? Bra had no idea. He father seemed sinister. . . . No, her father was up to something, and she was afraid.
Reminds me of my dad's little ... training sessions. Heh. Well, at least he wanted me to know how to defend myself. Vegeta is scary at times. Right now he's just an overprotective father. Still, I can't help but worry for Bra.
"Yes far too much... You're perfect hair is somewhat disheveled around your neck and ears. Your lips seemed redder more full. That tells me that you've been with someone. Thankfully from the smell it was a man." he laughed in his evil way, "that's good but not good for him. Tell me brat who is that you wish to hide from me?"
Heh. Veggie's evil laugh. He's so observant and almost smart, ne? Vegeta the detective (hm). Never figured Veg for a homophobe (except in Goku's case, lol:) but then ... a woman NOT needing men probably would scare even him (hmm). lol ... Vegeta, the bloodhound (hmmm). I feel sorry for Bra and Goten ... this is DEFinately not the best way for Veggieboy to find out.
Bra had no idea what he was doing she just looked at the hole in her ceiling with her brow furrowed. Then it hit her. He smelled Goten on her and was heading straight for him.
O.O Eeek!! Someone's in for an ASS whoopin!! Trust me ... they'll ALL be laughing about that hole later ...WAY later. UnLESS, Vegeta smelled the wrong guy!! *lol* As if Veg's nose is ever wrong ... or is it? SO.... what's Veggie gonna do? Uh..... stalk him? (I KNOW what you did to my daughter) Or .... challenge him to a fight? (If you can beat me, THEN you can have her). *lol* I used to expect MY dad to do one of those ... if not BOTH! LMAO!! ^_^
I feel like I'm standing in front of a firing squad. *gulp* Sorry for the extra long, lacking in cookie taste, and still very pointless review ... -_- |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: August 13, 2002 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT'S SO COOL! I LOVE WHEN VEG. KILLS NOT SO MUCH IN A LOVE STORY BUT IM A FREAK AND I LIKE IT WHEN THINGS DONT TURN OUT LIKE THEY ARE SUPPOST TO |
Reviewed By: PHEONIX On: August 13, 2002 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I CAN PICTURE MY DAD FREAKING OUT JUST LIKE VEG.
AND IT S NOT PRETTY. THIS IS A VERY COOL CHAP. AND I CAN'T WAIT TO READ THE NEXT! GOOD JOB! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Whoo hoo! An update!! :) Alright, you conviced me. This chapter was worth it (though I previously argued the importance of it), and I am definately looking forward to future chapters!
"G, she's my baby sis. I trust you with her. I really do, but if you break her heart I will kill you wish you back and let dad have at you." *blinks* LMAO!!! That's one's so good, I may quote you for life ... (:
LOL I think Goten gave Trunksie some BAD ideas about being with a Saiyan ... heh heh. AH! I'm Trunks and I'm horrified ... but was it really that good? "...ladies first..." That's it, I've heard enough! ... LMAO!!
FYI ... those are just SOME of the reasons why the new chappies are really great (hint hint;), and I say you MUST continue this story! ^_^ And yes, dammit, your "great ideas" for Vegeta's reactions (hehehe) DID add to my opinion ... a little. ^_~ |
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