| "Not for your ears" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: wingedkiller [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2011 18:48 EST
Comment/Review:
I'm really loving this story! Please continue with it! :) |
Reviewed By: KyouElidd [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2011 11:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. I do wish though that you'd update more and just a bit longer. I always hope to see a notification that you've updated. Keep it up! It's awesome! |
Reviewed By: Rogue's_Masquerade [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2010 01:49 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
The longer chapter is a definite improvement it allows you to get into the story. I love how you've given the characters realistic persona's for an apocalyptic world and how the prince has Nappa and Raditz doing the initial hunting. Nothing like a set of saiyan pit bulls to give this story a sense of ruthless foreboding, lol! I enjoyed the creativity of having Bulma hide among the more monstrous roles that people take during chaotic events instead of trying to just hide from everyone. I also liked how you immediately ruled out the dragon balls as a quick fix to the problem. I can't wait to see where you're going with this story but i've made it a habit to check on it about once a week to see if you've updated. Can't wait for the next chapter!! |
Reviewed By: Nykita On: December 02, 2010 05:32 EST
Comment/Review:
hmmm interesting and very good so far. Whats the pairing? |
Reviewed By: Rogue's_Masque [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2010 21:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like where you're going with this story. Its very different and very interesting, but i do agree the chapters could be longer and you do have a few grammatical errors, but otherwise its a story that has a lot of potential! |
Reviewed By: SaeriJenn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2010 22:58 EST
Comment/Review:
^_^ Oh so you've come over to post this one here as well? Nice chapters so far, though it'd be nice if they were a bit longer. A short snippet for the prologue is good, but chapter one needs a bit more depth to it. You've a good start. Your proofing is very polished just need to more to your story or you'll loose your reader to confusion. |
