Reviewed By: Master__Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2011 17:07 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked your story a lot. A few suggestions though. 1st and foremost i suggest you make more chapters for this story, this has a lot of potential. 2nd: you MIGHT want to put a LITTLE more description in the story, especially in the devouring scenes. 3rd: you might want to add a few more girls that have been changed, and MAYBE in the end have them all eat the mad scientist. One last thing i suggest is that (IF YOU WANT/CAN)you throw in a few sex scenes; either between the girls and the girls, or the people they are gonna eat. In the end its all up to you, and im no porno author so take what i suggested and do with it what you will. I look forward to any future chapters you add to this story, or any other stories you come up with. |
