| "Unnatural" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2011 21:04 EDT
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Finally some vegeta/bulma. Anymore yamcha/bulma scenes and i was going to rip my hair out. |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2011 19:53 EDT
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Finally some vegeta/bulma. Anymore yamcha/bulma scenes and i was going to rip my hair out. |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2011 17:11 EDT
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awww (pouts) i miss vegeta |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2011 12:47 EDT
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Review chpt 7: I actually appreciate the time skips. I think it makes the story flow better. Vegeta should be in for a shock when he gets back. |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2011 23:02 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder how bulma will react when she wakes up the next day. As always, another great chapter. I hope things get better for u. |
Reviewed By: LoveLikeARazor On: March 17, 2011 17:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good job! he is finally staring to open up...in his own way. very well written, and longer! hope your home life gets better. and I also hope you get to update soon! |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2011 09:29 EDT
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So I finally found time to read the last two chapters. I love how you are slowly developing their feeling for each other. great work! update soon. |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2011 07:06 EDT
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Chapter 5 review: is it bad that i'm really enjoying Yamcha's suffering here. I'm glad Vegeta's shell is finally starting to crack, and I can't wait to see more. Good luck with everything going on with your family and I hope everything works out for the best. :-) |
Reviewed By: LoveLikeARazor On: March 07, 2011 18:34 EST
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love chapter 3 & 4! read them last night( saw it on ff.net) and was going to review before I happened to fall a sleep! but you did very well on your lime! *claps hands* better than what i manage to write haha. and I love that whole awkward morning after we almost shagged! I think you captured it well! and thanks for the review notoriety! I hope you update soon! |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2011 20:58 EST
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Chapter 3 review I found Bulma's bad girl little voice reminding her of vegeta very entertaining. I could just imagine her constantly arguing with herself lol. Can't wait to see when all tension explodes :-) |
Reviewed By: LoveLikeARazor On: February 25, 2011 20:46 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like how Bulma's plans kinda backfired. and I like what you are doing! please keep it up, and i'm sorry your having such a crappy week! and hint if you want to get away from people do what I do. put a bookshelf in front of your bedroom door. just don't try and move a six shelf one full of books (they tend to hurt if they fall on ya) not that i'm not bright enough to take the books off first or anything haha |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2011 16:58 EST
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i actually really liked that you didn't have everything work out for bulma in chapter 2. I think she loves a challenge and if vegeta didn't provide one she would have gotten bored. (I'll review on ff.net too :-) |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2011 08:14 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The sexual tension is starting to build between my favorite couple. Great chapter, I hope things are going better for u. |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2011 09:40 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 1 review: very cute chapter. It fun to see Bulma slowly start to see past vegeta's exterior |
Reviewed By: lell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2011 05:55 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked the way you portrayed bulma and yamcha's breakup over vegeta. It was one of the most realistic I've seen! |
Reviewed By: caityuva On: February 06, 2011 09:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
really like what you have done so far, I hope you continue with it, V/B fics are my fav! good job with keeping these characters in character and like your movie scene. |
