Title: MORE PLEASE!
Reviewed By: ccam3 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2011 00:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It would have been better there was just a little more emotion between Yami and Yugi as they talked. There are some small typing errors. Formal paragraph style would be better, too, but do what makes you feel comfortable, as a writer. Please add more to this. I can tell this is the start of a great fanfic! An epic battle between Dratz and Yami would be awesome! As a Yugi/Yami fan, or cor, I would suggest being more "descriptive" of their relationship. Up that rating, you know? *wink wink* And, I don't think some hinted or light Dratz/ Yugi would be bad, but going "all the way" with it would be tragic. If you want to put a big focus on drama, than that would be a great thing to do, however. Please... give us more! |
