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| "Collision" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] | Title: Please finish it!
Reviewed By: kuka65 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2013 20:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying your story! It would be a pity if you stopped here, not giving an ending for your fantastically created characters. A story is like a kid for the writer, and I am sure you had lots of fun writing it, because I did have lots of fun reading it. Your characters, although OC sometimes, kept their main core intact. And the story has the potential to be great. So, pretty please wilth cherry on top, continue it and give a "bang" finish! Thanks! | Reviewed By: Yashahime On: November 04, 2012 22:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm wondering if you're ever going to get back around to this... I really enjoyed it. I've seen it in AFF too... and know it's not done there either... Please get around to it. Give it an ending at least. | Reviewed By: Imbrium69 On: June 14, 2012 19:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very good story. I love how InuYasha and Sesshomaru interact with each other. I can't wait to find out what happens between them. Please update soon! | Reviewed By: blackcat21 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2012 20:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story was a bet short but that is it this is dealt good I cant wait to see what will happen next | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2012 01:11 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! I had nearly forgotten all about this beauty; a true shame because I love this story. So I'm so glad to see you got your mojo back! Oh man...I'm a little torn between sympathizing with Sesshoumaru's plight and wanting to say screw him and that it's all his fault. Not the mating part itself since it's been established his beast had taken over, but he could at least explain himself to poor Inuyasha. It is perfectly understandable that he could not immediately refer to Inuyasha as his mate, but he shouldn't have just called him 'the hanyou' either. He could have used his name, or heaven forbid he actually acknowledge the boy as his brother. So it's totally Sesshoumaru's fault that his bitter servant put Inuyasha in such a crappy unused room - and I'll bet he's gone without food and water (or a bathroom) all this time too - and it's also totally Sesshoumaru's fault for Inuyasha's understandable misunderstanding of his feelings and the entire situation. Especially now that he's been put in such a room, and surely Inuyasha thinks Sesshoumaru knows and just doesn't care. Those two really need to have a talk, plus Sesshoumaru really needs to have a talk with his servants. Obviously since Inu's pregnant Sesshoumaru will have to eventually announce him as his mate and things should hopefully be a bit better for Inu after that; he'll never fully avoid the scorn that's always aimed his way but at least the servants, through gritted teeth and displeased eyes, will be polite to him. They need no other reason to treat Inuyasha with respect than to know that doing otherwise would incur Sesshoumaru's wrath, but he made no point of expressing that Inuyasha was anyone of importance at all. I can't wait to see what happens when Sesshoumaru realizes the condition his pregnant mate has been left in, and that it's more or less all his fault. Yeah it's the bitch's fault that put him in there, but she never would have dared, I'm sure, if Sesshoumaru had more specifically expressed which room to put Inuyasha in - like selecting the name of a specific room in the guest wing, or whatever - or if he had more specifically said that he is to be treated with respect. A simple 'See that the hanyou is well treated...' with a look that adds or else would have sufficed. They would have been confused, but it's not their place to question. Well, like I said, I can't wait to see what happens next! | Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2012 16:39 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so happy that you posted this story on this site. I'm having trouble with ff.net. This story is awesome, I was wondering when you would be posting chapter 5? I'm dying to know what happens next in there relationship! B reading U! | Reviewed By: DarkAnubisPuppy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2012 23:06 EST
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Really like this story, hope you haven't given up on it!!!! DAA | Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2011 16:15 EDT
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Usually, I don't like such a submissive Inuyasha, but I really do like this story and hope you continue to write. Poor Inuyasha. I feel so bad for him. Sesshoumaru should live with a heap load of guilt for a very, very long time. The jerk. Just a tip: In that last chapter, the word 'mate' was used repetitively. You might want to watch for excessive usage of particular words. Heh, I'm off to read the story again, for the umpteenth time. ^_^ | Reviewed By: tomaeiso On: September 17, 2011 22:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
10/10 all the way. This is a fantastic story and I can wait for more. It amazes me how good it is and I am not a big fan of inu/sess you no the whole brother thing but this story make me forget that through. thank you for a good escape from everyday life. P.S i love it :) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2011 14:08 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay, you updated! I don't mind the necessary violence at the beginning of these types of stories because what I really like is that culminating moment when Sesshoumaru realizes 'Gods...what have I done?!' I think the way you worked this, that he hadn't even known Inuyasha was a true uke and therefore he believed the hanyou had 'allowed' the mating on purpose to tie himself to him, makes perfect sense from Sesshoumaru's point of view. It's about the most in-character explanation I've ever seen for why he would be such a cruel bastard to Inuyasha after mating him. With no vivid memories of the mating itself, and knowing that he himself had been temporarily mad, lost to his own beast, it stands to reason that he would presume Inuyasha should have been able to fight him off, if he was truly unaware of the fact that Inuyasha was suffering his own heat and his own inability to prevent the mating. And having him get pregnant was the perfect way to wake Sesshoumaru up, because obviously Inuyasha has to be an uke for that to have happened, which made everything else click into place. I'm glad though that you said everything isn't going to be 'sunshine and daises' between them now, LOL, because that would be too unrealistic, too. I'm really looking to seeing what happens next. | Title: Marry Me?
Reviewed By: SaTaNScarLet On: September 10, 2011 22:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seriously, I love you for this! I've been trying to find a fic that matched this type of story line and THANK YOU for writing it! Will you marry me? Lol, But please continue! I can't wait to see what happens next. :) | Reviewed By: Nick F. On: August 20, 2011 13:26 EDT
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I usually don't read this kinda story, but you make it works!! I like how in character they are given the situation. Really looking forward to read more and find out what will happen :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2011 13:05 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's odd, I thought I reviewed this already. Shame on me! I read the first two chapters previously, and I'm pleased to see a third chapter because I really like the way this is going. I've seen this type of concept done before, and honestly I don't know why I like this type of story since it's so ridiculously off-canon and out-of-character, but none the less I've always had a soft spot for this type of scenario and so I'm glad you updated! I can't wait to see Sesshoumaru's reaction, or Inuyasha's reaction, for that matter. I can just see him instinctively curling into a protective ball around his stomach and begging 'Please don't kill it!' and Sesshoumaru stilling his hand, suddenly realizing with aghast horror the true extent of the monster he has become. Whatever you decide to do as the next scene, though, good job with that crazy cliffhanger! Looking forward to the next chapter. |
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