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| "Where the Waves Unfold" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: lovelyflip08 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2011 13:51 EST
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aww no problem! anyways im glad to see you updated this story! i think it's going to be really good. anyways, ohh the ending of the second chapter was very interesting with the necklace and everything. anyways hope you'll update soon! | Reviewed By: lovelyflip08 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2011 23:03 EDT
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very interested to see where this story is gonna go, but very good start. the only, it's not really criticism or anything, but suggestion that i have is to have some spaces between the dialogue and descriptive parts of the story. it'll just make it easier to read cause right now everything looks squished together. but other than that everything else such as descriptions, dialogue and the actual writing is fine. keep up the great work and cant wait for the next one! | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2011 09:04 EDT
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It looks like a good start. Keep going, I'll keep reading. |
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