| "Mate -- The Sequel" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
Reviewed By: Sesshoumaru'sPriestess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2011 20:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Both of your Mate fics were wonderful and this one did not disappoint!!! I loved how it ended and I laughed for a few minutes from the sheer pleasure of it all. Great work and thanks for the great read. ~SP |
Reviewed By: ponygirl2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2011 18:18 EST
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I'm reading it, not bad overall. In the 1st fic you got the sword wrong, Tenseiga is Sess's sword, Tessaiga is Inuyasha's sword, you also used 3 different spellings for Kirara/Kilala. On this 1 so far the new moon is moon DARK not full moon, so no light on the water unless it's star not moon light. |
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2011 19:30 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree, I think the way you ended it was perfect. It's clear what had happened already from him reverting back into his hanyou form, since we ALL knew his Demon side wasn't going anywhere until she conceived, but I love how you added Inuyasha's own hanyou-self realization as he sensed it. I also like how you don't show any of the others showing up or anything else that could have spoiled the moment. Now we can all assume that they eventually, gleefully, get up and dressed and whatever and rejoin their friends on their own time, at their own pace. Right now, this moment where you froze it, that time belongs to just Inuyasha and Kagome (and all of us!) Nicely done! |
Reviewed By: inuydemon On: November 25, 2011 17:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it.. |
Reviewed By: Shortsh1t [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2011 10:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nicely done I really injoy both Mate stories |
Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: November 23, 2011 20:56 EST
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I actually liked how this ended alot. And I don'r mean the sexual part ;) Seriously, it was a happy like ending that said everything that needed to be said without actually having to say it aloud. Love your work. |
Reviewed By: KaoriHigurashi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2011 22:04 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another awesome chapter, and I can hardly wait to read the next one! And I'd also like to state, in response to SplendentGoddess's thanks, that it was her that inspired me to start writing fanfiction, so of course, I'd name her as one of the greats. |
Reviewed By: woot On: August 31, 2011 12:51 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay a sequel! Lovin' it ^_~ I would like to note that a human woman's fertile period only lasts 2-3 days, and on the third day her body is already closing the gates (metaphorically). And getting a period every month does not indicate fertility, a woman can still get it even if a viable egg is not released. I'm sure there probably is a small change in scent, but there is a raise in temp by 1 or 2 degrees when an egg is released so the only way Kagome could have known how fertile she was or has been is if she had been taking her temp every morning for a long while. But it is a fanfic so I doubt specificity matters to most people. Just a random factoid I thought you might like to know. |
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2011 00:51 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woo-hoo! I was not expecting that, Kagome to suddenly go demon (and back again)...wonder what caused it? For a second there I thought he'd pulled out 'cause he'd sensed the spark of life within her. Hopefully she conceives soon, before he really does kill her with sex, LOL. As always, keep up the awesome work! (And thanks, KaoriHigurashi. *blushes*) |
Reviewed By: KaoriHigurashi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2011 19:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic, I hope you post again soon! It's hard to find authors these days who are so good at lemons, at least in InuYasha. Keep up the great work; you must be doing something right to get such high praise from one of the greats: SplendentGoddess. |
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2011 20:15 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah my.. what a busy boy Yashas' Demon been. But not see Kags is complaining much. :D And not to say Yash wont feel like crap when all be said and done. Need to have a really stern, and willful, talk with said Demon. Not behave, you don't get to come and play. hehe. :p Till next install, update when ya can! ;) |
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2011 12:46 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well so far her life doesn't really seem in danger, although he's definitely injured her in a few places. Of course we all know hanyou-Inuyasha will feel horribly guilty once this is all said and done, but so long as the pleasure continues to outweigh the pain I don't think Kagome will mind all that much. I can understand why she went to him, with the way she could feel him in her head. Hopefully his demon side really does know what it's doing. You certainly know what you're doing, so keep up the awesome work! |
Reviewed By: LeahChae [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2011 23:28 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love your style, something totally different and raw. It's a breath of fresh air. Well done |
Reviewed By: DemonInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2011 06:39 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I logged in and saw you had a new story I was like oh goodie! Super happy! And I saw the title.. I nearly died please finish! You and splendentgoddess are my favorite writers. And I so hope you two continue writing! |
Title: Great!
Reviewed By: ShayeButter On: August 04, 2011 23:24 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so happy you decided to continue with this story! I can't wait for more. I'm addicted =P |
Reviewed By: RubyJewel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2011 22:24 EDT
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Whoa! HOT! Lol. Love it. |
Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: August 03, 2011 13:38 EDT
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Oooh damn, the new moon was most definately unexpected! XD |
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2011 01:02 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa, saved by the bell...or new moon, whatever. I don't think I've ever seen him go from full-youkai to human before, and he's probably right, as soon as dawn breaches he'll most likely be full-youkai again right away, that side of himself pissed that it had been turned off against its will. If he doesn't turn full-youkai immediately upon his human night ending he definitely will transform again the second he catches Kagome's scent, so best to get to Kaede post-haste and get her covered in some kind of stinky herbs or something. Awesome update! Keep it the good work! |
Title: Sweet!
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2011 21:59 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Uh... what SplendentGoddess said! \0/ PS. and been reading, just been so dang busy, been backed up in my reviewing catch-ups. Hope am getting there tho. ;) |
Reviewed By: xFinalActsGirlx On: August 02, 2011 14:10 EDT
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You know when you're really thirsty on a hot hot day, and then you gulp down cold water and think to yourself, finally. Well FINALLY XD The sequal is born! Great great great!Let us quench that thirst. ;) |
Reviewed By: lilyyasha On: August 01, 2011 18:12 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Huzzah! Can't wait to read more |
Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2011 12:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woo-hoo! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel! |
