Title: Good first try
Reviewed By: Elven_mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2011 21:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad for a first timer. Your grammar could use a little work, and "mines" is not a word in the context that you used it. You should have written it as "Mine". "Mines" is only a word if you are talking about those exploding things that you step on and go 'boom!'. People only use that word in speech when they being playful and/or silly. But otherwaise a decent first lemon. |
