Title: Good Advice
Reviewed By: laWaya_aDisi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2012 19:51 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your at a good start and I hope you keep going. Your story is interesting and creative however, your grammar and writing style needs some improvement. Make certain that your sentences flow together with no words missing. Also, be sere that when the people are talking you are making a distinction between who is saying what; for example, try to have the dialog of each person indicated by a separation of paragraphs(1) or even write in script form(2). But aside from that, I think you are doing good and look forward to reading more. (1) "Bla bla bla." said Jain Doe "Bla bla bla." replied John Doe (2) Jain Doe: "Bla bla bla." John Doe: "Bla bla bla." |
