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| "Untitled" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Untitled - GW/SM crossover
Reviewed By: Dark_One Shadowphyre On: November 19, 2003 03:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
::sighs:: I confess that I'm rather disappointed. The premise is rather intriguing, but the interest level drops off slightly by the end of the first part. While I suppose I can understand the desire to meld the dubbed version of Sailor Moon with the original Japanese, I'd suggest picking and sticking with one set of names; if you're going to call Sailor Moon by the name "Serena" then the other Scouts/Senshi also need to go by their dubbed names (no matter how much those names grate on my sensibilities). As for my impressions of the second section... the first part of it could have been handled better. Both Serena's actions during the day, and her reactions at the meeting (which I'm actually surprised that she went to) were rather pathetic. Following that, upon arrival in the G-Boys' dimension, interactions between Senshi and Pilots were... out of character. Wufei, in particular, seemed completely over the top; in all my observations of the series - plus my knowledge of Chinese culture - I have never gotten the impression that Wufei was a woman-hater. Angry, yes, mostly at himself, and guilty, and that is due primarily to his personal feelings of failure at having "let" his wife die. His rantings and railings against weakness appear to stem more from his own self-perceived inadequacies and less from any real belief that women are inferior. Over all, I'd say this story was worth continuing... but only after you sit down with your story and yourself and figure out where you want to go with it. Then, question your motives in writing it. Don't continue unless you can come up with three really good personal reasons to see it through and you really want to write it to the best of your ability. If you ever want help/advice/editing, my email is darkone2813@mindspring.com and you are welcome to contact me.
| Reviewed By: Somebody On: July 21, 2003 14:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
Please update soon!!!!! Post up the next chapter please. | Reviewed By: Selene Moon On: March 01, 2003 13:44 CST
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I like your story
write another chapter soon | Reviewed By: Crystalstorm21 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2002 15:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Nice story so far.
Can't wait to see what happens next. |
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