Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2012 12:42 EDT
Comment/Review:
Your grammar is off in some places which makes reading it a little distracting, so I definitely recommend going back through and proofreading it a few times to correct all the errors, but it seems to me it's the way it is probably because you were in a hurry to post it, because despite the errors I could still feel the passion you have for this story and it's clear to me that you love it very much. I also have to say that this is a very unique idea, which is hard to do these days, LOL. But while the concept of Inuyasha waiting five hundred years for Kagome has been done over and over again, almost nobody ever has him age, so I really loved the idea of a middle-aged looking Inuyasha still getting together with a twenty-one year old Kagome. It's not that uncommon to see younger women with older men, so worst case scenario some people might just think she's with him for his money - assuming he even has any money, but even if he isn't that well off they'd probably assume that's the reason anyway. But so what? Who cares? She has her Inuyasha back. And let's not forget that she'll age quickly enough and then they'll look just right for each other, otherwise it would have been a young Inuyasha with an older Kagome, anyway. She'll still ultimately surpass him in age, but they don't need to be worrying about that just yet. I really, really liked this; if you just go back and fix all your little grammar flubs then it'll be absolutely perfect. :-) |
