| "A Fire is Born" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: VampireGoddess On: December 07, 2002 09:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awwww...I have to say this is one of the best storys have ever read!Please tell me this isn't the end of the story!! If it is then....its so romantic.I really like your story and uh..I just...I liked it a lot! I don't know what else to say! It kicked butt! |
Reviewed By: Legana On: October 18, 2002 13:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh, bloody hell, I don't even wanna continue the story, Vegeta is so weak, so OOC.
urgh, I hate it, but oh well, for ppl who like it, have fun. |
Reviewed By: katrinastrife On: September 08, 2002 04:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not too lemon, but better than a lot of what I've read (you guys chickened out on the fun part!) but you two... I never suspected you of writing such a thing!!! *eyes you guys* I can't wait for you to get the sequel up!
--jacqui |
Reviewed By: jeisgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2002 15:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Lovekittie,
My hentai mind is now completely satisfied...for the moment!! ^.^ Well now that we know Geta loves Bulma, will the feeling ever be mutual?? Did Geta leave the flower...or did someone else?? @.@ This story is very interesting and I hope you upload another chapter soon!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: jeisgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2002 15:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
Lovekittie and Rumpleteaser,
I love this story so far and hopefully you'll update again so that Geta and Bulma will... *evil hentai grin* heh, heh, heh... I know THAT scene will be extra good! Well, keep up the extraordinary work! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2002 19:01 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
heh heh heh . . . me thinks her parental units suspect something. As they should!! Ch, why did she have to go and be all witchy after that? Not that I blame her. Oh well.
"royal Bastard?" As in . . . Vegeta?? What the heck is the dream about? Is she remembering something, seeing the future, or just letting her Vegeta related feelings manifest into a dream? But what could be so bad that it made Bulma cry??
Hm . . . the tension's building!! haha Me likes . . . I can't WAIT to see what Vegeta's going to do next.
Keep up the good work!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: priss On: August 22, 2002 21:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
wow it sounds cool but it was such a tease! please update soon i don't like to be kept waiting |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2002 18:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
Aw, come on ... don't leave me hanging like this!! What's going to happen?? Is this only going to be a romance or will there be turmoil?? What makes this an AU and differ from the normal DBZ timeline?? ... what will happen next time?!?!
*lol* Sometimes I'm too inquisitive for my own good.
I'm not going to say that leaving out quotation marks is bad (I've written a couple of "script-style" fics, myself), but you need to find universal formats for dialogue and thoughts so the readers know what they're reading comfortably. OH ... and I just noticed that your fic is rated NC-17. Just so you don't get in trouble with MediaMiner, you need to add "hentai" to the genres of the fic. And a tip (is feeling quite the busybody at the moment), if you want more people to read your fic, you should put in a summary that says it's a B/V and what's going to happen(or at least how it starts)... blahblahblah.
This story has potential, so keep writing (the both of you:)!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: rose yuy On: August 19, 2002 21:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey great story
right more plz
thx |
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2002 21:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
Cool. Really good so far. Continue soon!! |
Reviewed By: Kashii On: August 19, 2002 19:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad, though I must say it would make for a better story if you put the characters speech in quotations. It just seems to fit the story better. ^_^ And you also put some capitals where it should have been lower case, but that's all right, Anyway, please continue.
*Kashii* |
