Reviewed By: Street Shark [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2016 09:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
If I review this fic in general, this is very good job with che
right mix of plot, emotions, characters development and, of course,
sex. If I review this has an Hentai fanfic, I'm sorry to tell you
that could have been much better. It's certainly original the harem
that Shinji build (no one that I know has but him with all the
Horaki's sister), but the sex scene are too short and quick, and
you can have developed them much better adding, for example, more
oral sex in the 3some scene and in the shower one, not to mention a
missed opportunity to build a 4 way sex scene. Anyvay I've really
appreciate this story, and I hope that you can write another one
soon.
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