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| "Side Effects" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2017 16:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! So good! I'm not surprised Inuyasha asked Kirara to drop
Kagome through the well, stubborn guy that he is, and I'm also
equally not surprised that Kagome thought of a way to avoid it and
stay in the past with him, where she needed to be. He very well
might have lost the battle had it not been for her presence,
yelling at him not to give up, holding his hand, etc. LOL, I had
completely forgotten that she was naked under the suikan! That was
a nice touch, and it really was like he was possessed, in a way, so
I loved the way you did it, his mental struggle, and how he
expelled out the evil youki. Considering WHAT had really happened
to him, after all, that he hadn't really been a full youkai after
all but just a possessed hanyou, his humanity suppressed due to the
foreign youki bolstering his own inner youkai, I'm sooooooooo glad
he's his hanyou self again. I was accepting him as a full youkai
only back when I thought he really was a normal full youkai who
just needed to pull his head out of his ass, but now we know that
wasn't the case at all. This was a wonderful conclusion to the
story. LOL, Miroku's sex-dar. Kagome got that right. We
don't need to see the reunion between him and his friends, I think
you ended it in just the right place, but I can easily imagine how
it's going to go and she's right, if he blushes or flusters just
once... I can see Miroku teasing him about the blush, like
why, what are you thinking, Inuyasha? And then a knowing Shippou
wanting to get a little even can "innocently" go and why do you
smell so funny? LOL! Anyway, wonderful story, and I'm looking
forward to seeing what you come up with next!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2017 14:42 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful! *applause* For some reason I wasn't expecting a sex
scene in this particular chapter, but it made absolute perfect
sense. They don't know what will happen when Inuyasha gets
his youki back, so this was quite literally a possible 'now or
never' moment, and if I were Kagome I would have made the same
decision. In fact I've had Kagome make that same decision more than
once, LOL, but I absolutely loved the way you did it here, and so
realistically! Too many people write sex scenes as if through
rose-tinted glasses. They're both virgins here, people! It's going
to be awkward, and at least for Kagome, marginally uncomfortable.
You handled it beautifully. Really looking forward to seeing
what happens next! Will his full youkai side rear its ugly head at
first and there will be a battle of wills Inuyasha must win, or
will he just automatically be himself? Full youkai but himself and
he has to will the foreign youki away? Or will he have his full
youkai personality but then somehow that side of him gets a soft
spot for Kagome (gee I wonder why) and voluntarily concedes defeat
and lets the hanyou persona take over? There's a few different ways
the 'morning after' with renewed youki can go down, so I can't wait
to see what path you took!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2017 18:11 PDT
Comment/Review:
Yay! *happy dance* It's like a meth addict coming down and
realizing the horror of what he's done. But what's going to happen
when being human wears off? Is that the one thing Kagome realized
at the end there? Surely this can't be permanent, especially if it
wasn't solely the result of her spiritual energy. If his
heart and soul somehow beat his inner youkai into submission, it
can only be temporary, and if he really did permanently bond
with that extra youki, then he'll become a full youkai again
instead of a hanyou, when his youkai blood restores itself. But, as
Kagome pointed out, his heart and soul won out, he "woke up"
because the real him shined through, even if only for a
moment. The real key, then, is going to be becoming stronger than
his inner beast, and not letting his youkai side take control of
him again. Maybe Tetsusaiga didn't work as a shield because it had
rejected him, so maybe if he can make amends to his sword (or maybe
if Totosai can make adjustments) it will better protect his mind
and he can keep his new full youkai strength without turning back
into a colossal asshole. Also, like they both acknowledged, the
longer he stayed full youkai the worse and worse he got, so maybe
when he first changes back he won't go back to where he left off,
but it'll be like that gradual build-up again, so maybe
right when he changes back he can just keep reminding
himself that he knows Kagome and the others were right, he
did change, and he can vow to himself to not let himself
change again. Unfortunately, depending on how strong the influence
of that foreign youki and his youkai side is, it again would be
like my analogy of a drug addict. This time will be different,
honest! Except it never is, and once high, Inuyasha would go right
back to being the bitter, paranoid dick he became, who doesn't
believe his friends care about him and who doesn't believe he cares
about his friends. This is quite the emotional roller coaster
you've got going here! Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2017 17:18 PDT
Comment/Review:
Whoa, I had not been expecting that. In regard to chapter 5.
Stupid MM logged me out and I had to go log in again (well I didn't
have to but I wanted to post my review logged in) and then I saw
you JUST literally right now uploaded chapter 6, so I will be
reading that shortly! But in the meantime, to get my thoughts for
chapter 5 out, I was really starting to think about my roid rage
analogy, and as he was storming away, running away from his
troubles, I was thinking, check that, he's not on steroids, he's on
meth! Does the same damn thing. Makes you totally turn against your
friends, thinking they are the ones who turned against
you. When he started fighting the phantom oni I wasn't sure
if maybe it was the ghosts of the youkai that originally owned the
youki he's absorbed, like he's got literal ghosts haunting him, but
maybe it really was just his imagination like he concluded. I
wasn't expecting you to Dr. Jekyll / Mr. Hyde him. For a minute
there, I was thinking yay! He successfully realized what an ass he
was! And well, he did, but then it turns out it was his youkai
side, and from that ending there (can't blame Kagome for zapping
him one bit, because we all know he would have broken the
well, and temporal paradoxes notwithstanding, she really
needed to avoid becoming trapped in the future) I'm now fully
convinced that he's still been a hanyou all along. He's capable of
becoming a full youkai all by himself, after all, if his youki gets
stronger (or later in the manga, when Tetsusaiga helps him, and he
has a clear head then, too) so it's possible for his human blood to
go dormant, just like his youkai blood naturally would go dormant
on the new moon and he seemed fully human. Had he truly
gotten rid of his human blood and become a true full youkai, Kagome
would not have been able to turn him human, he would have just
died. He would have puffed away into sparkly dust as pure youkai do
when they are purified. Instead, it seems to me she purified out of
him the extra, foreign youki, and also his own, but just
like with the barrier of Mt. Hakurei, it's a temporary purification
which made him human. Kinda wish he'd have come across Sesshoumaru
before this happened, but I don't know how close this is to the end
yet. On the one hand it could be almost over, but you mentioned in
your author's note that you've gotten ideas for a few changes in
later chapters, so that tells me it might not be almost
over. Guess I should go see what happens in chapter 6, huh? Here I
go!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2017 16:27 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man... You've got me crying right along with everyone else, you
bastard, LOL. Damn you're a good writer! And Inuyasha is a total
and colossal asshole. I can only hope he eventually realizes
this for himself. Even Tetsusaiga stopped working, and he
knows, or at least should remember, that the secret
to the sword working is his desire to protect his friends, protect
Kagome, and the general goodness in his heart. That said, yes
Sesshoumaru forced it to work against its will, once (twice if you
count the third movie), because Sesshoumaru is cool like that, so
that should tell Inuyasha not only that his sword now finds him
unworthy, but also that he's not as strong as he thinks he is or
else he would be able to force Tetsusaiga's compliance. What
Inuyasha really needs is Sesshoumaru to show up and hand him his
ass. Like you said, he should have reflected inwardly,
wondered if maybe, just maybe, he really was different, especially
after his sword rejected him, because Tetsusaiga wouldn't jump to
paranoid conclusions like his friends might, but he just can't see
it. He's not just a petulant teenager, but he's a petulant teenager
during a roid rage. It's starting to look more and more like he's
not going to snap out of it while full youkai, so maybe changing
him back to hanyou is the better course of action. And maybe
it's not even really 100% his fault, because it's not like it's all
his youki, after all. It's not like he just somehow managed
to eliminate his human blood and his youkai blood filled the gap.
He absorbed and bonded with a conglomeration of random, mixed,
foreign youki, and my 'roid rage' analogy might be closer than I
realize. Maybe Myouga or Totosai will show up and sense the
unbalance in him. Or maybe my love of Inuyasha as a whole is just
grappling for any plausible excuse to forgive his behavior, LOL. At
any rate, you've got quite the talent for pulling the heartstrings
and this story does not disappoint. I can tell from the pace of it
that we're not looking at a huge story, like some of your
other epics, but there's still a lot of ground to cover. You
will ultimately give us our happily ever after, won't you?
Real life does suck, but Inuyasha lives in a fairy tale
whether he realizes it or not, LOL.
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2017 15:21 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa! Crazy-intense third chapter. I figured you'd have Inuyasha
transform into a dog eventually, but I wasn't expecting it so soon,
and I had figured that Kouga would show up at one point, but I
hadn't expected that so soon, either. There is definitely
something wrong with Inuyasha! Or, well, there's not really
anything wrong with him except the age-old expression
"Absolute power corrupts absolutely." Kouga and other 'nice'
full-youkai (let's conveniently ignore the fact that they used to
eat humans) were born that way, and they are what they are.
Inuyasha, having spent his whole life...well we know his back
story, so it's no wonder why he's reveling in his newfound power
now. But jeeze, Inuyasha, you're being a royal asshole! Plus I
think you're right, I mean Kagome's right, in that he hadn't
really been trying to kill Kouga before now, so his attitude
has definitely changed, and while Kagome needed to use the rosary,
we now also have a problem in that it's broken. Um, make a new one?
Like, now? Or, if you're including bits of anime truth in this,
then she can just fix it again, like at the end of the third movie.
Assuming she can collect all the beads. At least he's out cold, so
that gives her time. LOL, I also liked the comedic relief of him
turning back into his humanoid form sans clothing. I wasn't
expecting that, 'cause I just figured the clothing getting absorbed
or changed in the flare of youki was an automatic part of it all.
Didn't think it was something he had to learn how to do,
LOL! That'll be fun to explain, when he wakes up wondering why he's
wearing his robes as a blanket. Also looking forward to finding out
how much of the battle he remembers. I don't think the manga
or anime ever really explains point blank, but I think it's
presumed Sesshoumaru remembers what all happens while he's in dog
form. He's switched back and forth in battle and not ever seemed
confused, so it would make sense for Inuyasha to remember, but it
might also be fuzzy because it was his first transformation, so
however you play it is fine with me. Also yes I agree, no
zigzagging pink balls of energy, LOL. Although if he could learn
how to fly in his humanoid form, that'd be cool. I imagine you will
have him do that at one point, if he didn't already. Kagome
did say it was like he was floating on air. Maybe he was!
Well, I can see this entire story ultimately having one of two
conclusions, since I can't imagine you're going to blindside us
with an angsty ending where Inuyasha goes fully evil and has to be
killed. So, ignoring that unsavory (and hopefully unrealistic)
third option, the other two options are either that he finally
accepts the fact that he's been an ass, something (like maybe he
really does accidentally hurt Kagome - but she'll be okay) gives
him a moment of self-reflection and he finally becomes good ol'
Inuyasha again, in spirit, while maintaining his youkai body. Or,
alternatively, he gets out of control but instead of having
to kill him they (either with or without his permission) discover
some way or another to suck the extra youki out of him and turn him
back into his hanyou self. A hanyou that would then be eating
nothing but crow for the next several months. Personally, I'm kind
of hoping he somehow pulls his head out of his ass but stays youkai
in the end, but if that's not the way you've done it and he turns
back into a hanyou that's fine, too. Looks like either way we're in
for a long ride of crazy drama, although maybe not that long
since we had the Kouga fight three chapters in. However many
chapters this bad boy is, I'm going to enjoy every single one of
them! Now I gotta wait to see what happens next. Looking forward to
it!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2017 14:32 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Uh-oh, maybe I spoke too soon regarding the whole Inuyasha is still
Inuyasha thing. At first I was prepared to comment more on Kagome
like well, she's fifteen we gotta remember. We can allow her
some selfishness. I can understand her wanting to mourn the
hanyou she had fallen in love with, the hanyou she had accepted
fully as he was, and I can understand her feeling hurt that her
love for him, even if he just thought it was friendship...that that
wasn't enough for him. But those are selfish thoughts. I was
prepared to let Kagome have the time she needed to come to grips
with herself, and truly look inside her own heart. If she loves
Inuyasha, truly, and really does want him to be happy, then yeah -
under normal circumstances - she should accept him as he is. Can't
fault the guy for being ecstatically happy because the thing he
always wanted, but then had come to grips with never getting, was
suddenly given to him anyway. Yes, he had learned to accept himself
as he was. I've accepted that I'm not a millionaire, LOL, but if
somehow I was suddenly given a million dollars anyway then hell
yeah I'd want it and be happy about it! Now, if I turned into a
total rich asshole because of it and shat on all my friends, that
would be grounds for them calling me on it and telling me how I've
changed and that they liked me better before I was rich. Of course,
confronting Inuyasha about how he obviously really is
changing is much more dangerous than just telling a suddenly rich
friend they've turned into a dick. He truly is becoming like
Sesshoumaru. Which earlier had me wanting to point out that
Sesshoumaru walks at a pace plenty slow for Jaken and Rin to keep
up, but I honestly think Inuyasha was unaware of how fast he was
walking. But had some stupid bumbling forest sprites gotten in
Sesshoumaru's path and threatened him he would've just busted out
the youki whip and been done with it. Those tree youkai did
threaten them, and the sprite was making the girl sick, but
I also agree that just beating them to a pulp should have sufficed.
That Inuyasha seems to have enjoyed killing them, rather than being
indifferent to it and chalking it up to logic, is even more
unsettling. Looking forward to seeing what happens in chapter
three!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2017 14:02 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sooooooooooo glad to see a new story from you! I actually started
to read chapter one back on the day you first posted it, but real
life got in the way and I had to step away from the computer just
at the part where Inuyasha ducked out of the way of the first ball
of youki, in the hamster's den, but before the rather
explosive conclusion of his fight with the hamster. I kind
of suspected what you meant by him finally getting what he always
wanted, but I was curious to see what you had in store for us. As
soon as he fell into the pit of youki I knew what was happening.
I'm REALLY looking forward to seeing where you take this story, and
Kikyou's reaction, since she's still alive, and Inuyasha's reaction
to Kikyou's reaction, and what it might help him realize about
Kagome. I can understand Kagome's initial reaction, of course, and
I don't doubt Inuyasha's going to let his increased power go to his
head and be an ass about it for a while, LOL, but the fact that
Tetsusaiga still works (which actually makes perfect sense since at
this point it's truly his sword, having been repaired with
his own fang way back when, and besides that he still has his
desire to protect his human friends in his heart) shows me that
he's still a good person deep down inside. I'm sure Kagome misses
his ears, will miss his softer side like during the new moon, but
she's Kagome, so she still loves him. She's just worried about how
he feels, if he's still the real him or not, and if he might
not be capable of softer human emotions anymore, but I'm not
worried about that. Like he said, he's still Inuyasha. He can be an
idiot, but he truly cares for Kagome. I haven't read chapters two
or three yet but I'm going to right now! One good thing about not
being able to finish chapter one the first time around is that I
now get three for one! Just decided I'd review it one chapter at a
time, and review it here on MM since probably no one else will,
LOL. So, off to read chapter two I go!
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