Reviewed By: Katrina Kadabra [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2002 08:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is good, but I think you need to give it some more. You're exploring Fiore's thoughts, he obviously has a lot of them. How does he feel about when he met Darien? What was he thinking as Sailor Moon healed him? I think if you put some more detail to the story, it will be much more powerful. |
