| "Love is a battlefield" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Gotens ssj gurl On: September 29, 2001 20:59 CDT
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Oh wow it's a good fic adn you were brave enouh to do yaoi for your fic!! I could never I just don't have the guts... a suggestive note: (you don't have to it's your fic and all) you could like though have a new line for new character's speeches it got hard for me to follow who ws talking in some points. |
Reviewed By: talimee On: October 02, 2001 04:41 CDT
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Hey, Sley!
This is a very promising fic, you have not so usual pairings and I especially like the idea of adding space and other species.
But there are some things I think you could do better - you're not untalented, so why don't you go further into your talent and are describing sceneries and characters more carefully? It would be very interesting to see some musings in the charas - especially Kakarott! Does he really don't care about the lifes he's destroying, now? He has his memories back, yes, but he's still raised as a protector of the innocents. I just can't believe he would make such a turn without afterthoughts or hesitation.
I hope you don't mind - it's still a very interesting fic and I think the lemon was very well done. |
Reviewed By: Kiya Sama On: November 02, 2001 07:56 CST
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HELLO!! Yes I finally logged in and I will be posting soon. *grinning*...I love the fic so far and hopefully you will be able to post some more soon! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: anonymous On: November 02, 2001 08:49 CST
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Um...I was just wondering where chapter 1 went??? Anyway, it's pretty good so far, please continue. |
