Reviewed By: Kari Kamiya Takaishi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2004 15:42 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why the nine you may ask? For one reason. It's a nice Prologue, but there's something missing. Like the characterization isn't there. I don't think the group would actually treat T.K and Kari like that. Maybe Tai saying something to the effect like, "Aren't you to young to be poking your nose in someone elses business?" Lol. I see that happening. But then I would also see Sora telling him differently, making him understand that they need to be a part of the team and so on and so on. Other than that, you have a half way decent story. If I didn't have much of a headache right now I'd read the rest of what you wrote. I know how it is when an author actually strives on reviews. Lol. In my personal mind keeps the writer writing. Keep up the great work. Shame your not back on fanfiction.net though. But I can handle this. TTFN. ~KKT
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