Reviewed By: Jaded Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2003 11:32 CST
Comment/Review:
It's quite short. Try to add more detail in. Just don't say something happened, show how it happened. And there needs to be more character development.
One good thing about it: the spacing. I hate it when people don't space their stories. But the spacing in this is very good.
~Jaded Rose |
