"Hard to Get" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Reviewed By: midori19 On: January 10, 2004 17:36 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I love youre story why have'nt you continued I check your story out like every two days for about a year checking to see if you have updated .I would love it if you continued.
| Reviewed By: Raquel On: September 12, 2003 05:51 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I loved this fic, hope you post more even though it has been awhile. I really enjoyed reading it. Lina and Zel are going to rock the gumdam world. | Reviewed By: Sailor Cherry Star [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2003 00:41 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAASE CONTINUE!!!! THIS IS JUST SUCH AWESOME STORY!!!!!!!! CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE!!! I would give this story a 20 if i could, but it only goes up to 10...I wanna know who wins the fight!!! I hope Lina does...what Wufei said was mean!!! YOU JUST GOTTA CONTINUE!!!! | Reviewed By: Cat On: March 23, 2003 18:34 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Loved it hope you write more. Can't wait to read the battle Lina has. | Reviewed By: Dark Peppermint On: December 25, 2002 06:28 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: I absolutely loved this fanfic! It is very fun to read, and althought there were a couple typos, they were hardly noticable. I'm glad to have come across this...I mean, come on, how much better can it get? Shounen ai, Slayers, and Gundam Wing wrapped in a delicious fanfic tortilla, smothered with...I dunno...'special sauce?' There's something about the way it's written that makes me want to read more. I like the events; they're wonderful, but how they were portrayed really makes the story great. I can't wait to read more!
Oh yeah...I'm kinda easy to please. I would take Mir's advice if I were you, but I think that he or she was way too harsh. All the same, it's a good idea to keep it in mind.
All the laughs (but none of the giggles) Maria (Dark Peppermint) | Reviewed By: Mir On: October 01, 2002 12:35 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10 Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review: Style of Writing: I gave you a 6, since you often repeat yourself. For instance in the first line of story you say
"Heero walked into the living of Quatre’s mansion where the other four pilots were currently at. The other pilots just looked up, knowing well that J’s perfect was going to say something. " You could easily have skipped 'were currently at and not have missed any information. Or you could have said living instead of at, giving us more information. there happens to a lot of similar statements though out the fic, I just choose this one since it was the first line. Cutting out a lot of these would make the story flow alot better.
Spelling & Grammar: 5, You have alot of confusing statements, for example the following That look of excitement and yet not since the perfect soldier wasn’t supposed to show emotions but you could tell it was there if you were to look closely. Huh? I figured out what you were trying to say from context(see repetition) but this sentence made no sense to me. Also you have alot of huge pharagraphs which are difficult to read.
Originality/Creativity: 6, Sorry but sending the gundam pilots or Lina to school is not the most original idea in the book. And putting Duo into a dress is an overused theme. But the combination could work out well.
Enjoyment Factor: 8, Acctually while there were some OCC moments for all the characters, and Trowa just seemed OCC to me, for the most part the came out fairly IC which made this a pleasent read.
Overall Rating: 6, Decent. The long pharagraphs and repetion got to me, but the overall ICness made it a pleasent read. |
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