| "dates,crossovers, and me" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: Esh...
Reviewed By: Talentless On: December 20, 2003 09:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, your grammar and spelling were awful. Millionare. Though the pairrings themselves were original, the plots were monotonic, and really everyone was jumping the gun when it came to sex. The only part that I found amussing were the inserts from blackluster solider. grins Apart from all the mistakes that could be easily corrected, I feel that this fic has a lot of potential if you are willing to place more thought into it...consider looking into a beta reader who's not a hentai to help you out. Always and forever, ~Talentless
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Reviewed By: ghgfdh On: July 21, 2003 14:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fic went a lil fast but hey they r sapose to be short! hehehe (WHOS YOUR SODA!) |
Reviewed By: Yami Chick On: April 07, 2003 16:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really liked it, but you should describe everything a little better. |
Reviewed By: jster1983 On: November 26, 2002 15:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay Try Serenity and Bandit Keith I know he is a creep but someone so pure and kind as Joey's little sister may be able to actually change Keith's evil ways even tough they are in the same show. They were all I could think of that and either Weevil and Serenity or Rex and Serentiy. you'll see I mean the 3 guys I am talking about actually lost to Joey and they all hated it. |
Reviewed By: Ryudo On: October 20, 2002 21:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think u could put some more writing into it. Like more details with the clothing coming off and the hole sex part could be a little longer. I do like the part with the mixters of the type of cartoons. |
Reviewed By: Setsuna On: June 02, 2003 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Comment/Review:
should describe things a bit more...haha...i'd like to see wha happens wit Hiei and Tea sho yea...continue
P.S. u shouldn't put TOO much sex details in...just mah opinion... |
