| "Things are never what they seem" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Kaoru27 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2002 20:03 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey you need to do something about speeding up your updates. You are going to have a problem if you don't. I will get the author-swatter out and beat you with it J/K. But don't make me use it. Vegeta needs a meaner personality if you know what I mean. Just a little. If this was an angst fic than I would tell you to have Vegeta sever all ties to Goku. Make him really depressed and then get to all the mushy stuff. It is always more fun to abuse the sayaijins first than have them get a happy ending. One other sugestion if you were going to do angst make sure you kill ChiChi and Bulma before getting Goku and Vegeta together. I am a very evil person when it comes to that. I love to tourture and play with the sayaijins lives. I will be the master and they are the pawns of my sick little mind. Sorry I'm going off on what I would do. Oops I didn't mean to get carried away. |
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2002 20:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You seem to make the charaters more interesting when you have dialogue with them before and after each chapter. I really enjoy that. I also love lemons call it the hentai in me. And of course I love Vegeta and Kakarott.
I wasn't aware that you also posted here. I come to this site to read NC-17 snice FF is being retarded. So I saw your story here and wanted you to know so I reviewed.
Maybe next time I'll get to tickle Vegeta, that could be interesting.LOL
Waiting................ |
Reviewed By: anonymous On: September 28, 2002 00:53 CDT
Comment/Review:
Lol, this is pretty funny so far. Keep on writing! |
