| "Going Up, Sir?" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
Title: Good, but you can do so much better!
Reviewed By: megummi_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2005 03:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must've read this fic a dozen of times surfing this lonely frontier of the interweb. :) I've enjoyed it immensely (along with your other Eva-AU-works, but this one is my favorite) and cherish it as a wonderfully rare piece of Kaworu/Shinji smut. However, with each re-reading my enjoyment lessens. Winces come from lack of spellcheck and sometimes completely out of character commentary. You probably won't read this but: Your ideas (as shown by my numbers above) are extremely creative! I like the idea of Kaworu as an elevator boy... it's a mundane job but yet for him it somehow fits. I also like how you work Shinji's IC relationship with his dad in there (though not as much for the quick humor fix, I'm sure he'd find it rather awkward to be caught in that position by his dad of all people, no matter how alternative your universe is!). However, where this creativity and pleasant reconnect ends is with the grammar and spelling errors that always detract from the intelligent readers' enjoyment, smut or not. Also, you have issues with staying in character. You paint Shinji from the beginning as innocent and untouched and shivery and I doubt he would change in the course of a few moments, no matter how good Mr. Nagisa is. ;D Some of the lines are a bit corny; at least those coming from Shinji as you portray Kaworu as having more experience effectively. Other than that, I must say I enjoy what you've done with this, and hope you write more smut of this pairing! Thanks!
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Reviewed By: pinky a blue flamingo On: April 01, 2004 19:50 CST
Comment/Review:
WOW O.O just wow that was awsome i love it. i was listening to love to love you baby (no doubt) while reading. yeah good stuff i'm sending this to my sis she loves yaoi oh and i read your gym fic too not as good as this was but still really nice ^_^
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Reviewed By: Chibi Kitsune On: February 08, 2004 14:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*blush (^_^ But I can't do it as well as Shinji)* So THAT'S your hardcore... ^_^ YUM!!! *reading other reviews* You're a guy? Cool! I love your A/Ns, they're so funny. I love your fics, they're really sugoi! I sound like I'm really sucking up so I'm gonna stop now. Must go worsip at my Kaworu shrine (I really am gonna make a bishie shrine!)
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Title: Going Up, Sir?
Reviewed By: Phoenix 316 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2003 16:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is so great. I love the Shinji/Kaworu pairing. there are not enough of them out there. Have you ever heard of the Aerosmith song Love in An Elevator? Because I channeled that song when I was reading this.
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Reviewed By: katsa5 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2003 16:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeeesh. One of the best lemons I've ever read. You are terrific! You leave a reader drunk. And the ending! O_O Will there be a sequel? Something like 'Exploring of the House (among other things)'?
You say that you have once posted this on FF.net? Are you one of the authors that had fics deleted because of NC17 rating? So am I. Terrible that such a great fic gets deleted. |
Reviewed By: WilliDrairAngel On: July 31, 2003 20:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Happy, happy, happy, Yaoi, Yaoi, Yaoi!!! n_n More, more, MORE!!! |
Reviewed By: Sweetdeily [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2003 03:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think, to date this is one of a very small congration of smutty Kaworu and Shinji-kun fictions. There SO needs to be more. ^^ I simply adored the smut, its very hot and good and i think i need a cold shower now. ~.^ i really would love to see more Kaworu/Shinji AU smut in the Evangelion AU writing world... or in the world or on a table floating in space going at it like rabbid bunnies in heat.... maybe forgoing the table and just going at it, whips, odd lube and lots of kinky bondage type things. *is addicted to the idea of Shinji, bondage, kinky horny evil wittle Kaworu's and umm... so on*
Please write more like this!!! |
Reviewed By: hoshi no tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2003 20:26 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Repressed sex god indeed. You are a veritable *goddess* of smut! |
Reviewed By: Suki Tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2003 04:11 CST
Comment/Review:
Please sir, I want some more.
Great fic! Care to write a sequal for us? PLEASE!!! |
Reviewed By: Ayumu On: February 04, 2003 20:16 CST
Comment/Review:
Lol. Funny and hot. Two thumbs up! XP
-Jin |
Reviewed By: Megumi-chan On: December 29, 2002 10:03 CST
Comment/Review:
Oops. I forgot. If you were wondering (or some other were wondering) I don't give out a perfect score when I rate something. I don't know why but I just can't bring myself to do it! I even gave Harry Potter a 9 out of 10 rating when my classmate told me to rate it and Harry Potter's my most favorite book!!!!!!
Since I'm like that, I always rate things a point below the actual. So if you got a 9, it means 10. And if you get an 8, it means 9. You get my drift?
So, GOMENASAI~ !!!!!! To all the readers, GOMENASAI~ for duping all of you!!!! To the author, GOMENASAI~ for lying and making you depressed!!! To the people of the world, GOMENASAI~ for tainting the world and making people suicidal!!! To God, GOMENASAI~ for sinning and damning myself and others to hell!!!! To...!!!
^^;;; Oops. I think I got too carried away with the Ritsu-imitation... (Ritsu Souma in Furuba AKA Fruits Basket. He's the person who apologizes for EVERYTHING!!!!!!)
Anyways, (for the last time) Gomen!!! *bows*
Ja, Mata.
~Megumi~ |
Reviewed By: Megumi-chan On: December 29, 2002 09:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of writing is 8 because I want it 8, spelling and grammar is 9 because you spelled Kaworu's name wrong, originality and creativity is 7 because I felt like giving it 7, enjoyment is 9 because it's my favorite pairing (and admit it, who doesn't like reading about your favorite pair doing each other?), and over-all rating is 9 because I think that the average of the whole rating thing is 9.
Now, to the important things. I TOTALLY agree about Spike Spencer (Shinji's dubber)! He really does have a nice voice! He does the voice Majik (Magic, Majic, whatever... haven't really researched this yet) too in Orphen.
And about the comment you made on the disclaimer? I'd probably do that too if I were the one who owns it. ^^;;;
Have you watched Orphen yet? I advise you to watch it. Majik is so adorable and he reminds me so much of Shinji (think of Shinji with light blue eyes and blond hair). There's also a character who's so much like Asuka but she is paired to Orphen, the leading character. ( THANK GOD! )
I guess I should stop this right now. It's getting too long already...
JA!!!!!
~Megumi~
P.S. My e-mail's megmikage@kurama.zzn.com! Don't hestitate to e-mail me when you want someone to talk to!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: syenite kai On: December 05, 2002 01:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
XD XD XD XD!! oh holy fuck you had me laughing outloud when the doors opened!! oh god, oh god XD XD XD was this fic dedicated to me/kai o.o? i know there're tons of kais out there.. i need a more unique online name x.x anyways. this is an AWESOME fic! thank god it's au because i know nothing about the original evangelion. anyways, hee. i hope you have more of this kinda fics XD coughdaikencough. hee! |
Reviewed By: Shella-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2002 05:14 CST
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I agree ... there's got to be something hiding under Shinji's innocent-little-boy demeanour, may as well be a sex beast. At least that way Kaworu will benfit from it.
Feel privileged. This is the first truly hardcore, explicit stuff that I've read that I liked. Mebbe cos it's Shinji/Kaworu? *shrugs* For some reason, with those two, anything goes. I like the note about the whips at the end too, stirs all kinds of wicked hentai images & thoughts. Hurrah!
Cheers,
--Shella-chan |
Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2002 15:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
sugoi!!! me like!!! more!!!!! SHINJI+KAWORU 4EVA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KAWORU IS A BETA COUPLE WITH SHINJI THEN ALL THE OTHER PILOTS!!! (in my personal opinion)
MORE!!! |
Reviewed By: Rose named Maury On: October 02, 2002 00:14 CDT
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Shit shield? I like that! ^_^ I always laugh every time I read what Shinji says to his old man at the end! ^^ |
Reviewed By: Bishounen Lovah On: October 01, 2002 12:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Youre a guy, and you can write such insane yaoi? I luv you man!!!!!!!!! More!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Suzume Tori On: October 21, 2002 17:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Lol, it's so funny XD they are both a bit ooc (repressed sex god... Hehehe, I actually just about died reading the authors notes XD) But it was yummy.... :p A little unbelievable, but hey, what are pwp's for XD
KAWORU AND SHINJI FOREVER!!!!!!!! **runs down the hall with a banner and screaming** |
Reviewed By: Shuuichi M. On: October 01, 2002 14:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Um, Bishounen Lovah, Purple Mist is a woman, silly. ^_^ I know 'cause she's my sister. She was using a figure of speech earlier. |
