Reviewed By: Fujimiya_Jai On: November 30, 2002 16:03 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I tend to be harsh with my numbers so let me explain them. First off, I really liked it, but there were some things that I thought needed to be addressed. Spelling and grammar-not bad, a few typos and one repeatedly misspelled word. Shore=beach, sure=positive. Lessee, what else? If Heero was in such dire medical straits, how is it that he managed to fuck without any problems/soreness/pain? Oh, and just for reference, a lot of boys who masturbate keep something around even when they don't finger themselves. It may be lube or massage oil or numerous other things...Friction may feel good in the moment, but friction burns hurt. A lot. Ouch.
Hmmmmmm I think that's it. *realizes she knows way too much about this stuff* *shrugs* Oh well. |
