| "What A wonderful mother" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Passerby_Dyl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2007 08:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well first things first... I hate incest fanfics. They are disgusting. I've only written 1 as a request and will never again. Now then, this has to be the most rushed fanfic ive seen. I do think you have potential as a writer but I think that you should have planned this out a little bit better. And also, 11 by 3 inches? That just made me laugh.
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Reviewed By: Oolong On: January 04, 2003 08:43 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
11 by 3 inches? that's gotta hurt!
what if gohan didn't aprove?
good for a laugh though. |
Reviewed By: Skayda [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2002 18:43 CST
Comment/Review:
I've read a different Chi Chi/Gohan incest fic that was, in all honesty, much better. Even though I shudder in pure ickiness at the idea of any type of incest (Even though I wrote a mother-son incest short story for a request...) good writing is good writing, and this, sorry to say it and so harsh, is not good writing. You have potenial, don't get me wrong, but you need work and lots of practice. Even writers need to 'train'. Work on the dialog and think to yourself before you write something, (such as his 11 inch dick? Now, I realize there are guys who are well-endowed 'down there', but they are few and far between), is this REALLY believable? Will my readers buy this, even for a moment, or will they say; "Pashaw!" and click the back button? Even sexual fantasies between partners who would never, ever hook up should be at least half-way believable.
Sorry if my opinions offend. |
Reviewed By: Saiyoku Jade [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2002 03:49 CST
Comment/Review:
Er.. ummn I don't know what to say except:Sorry but I didn't like that at all im not into the whole incest fic thing. |
Reviewed By: idy On: October 27, 2002 16:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey um cool job.i liked it even though im not into incest but good work.i wanna know how this story ends. |
Reviewed By: U r a sick ass On: October 18, 2002 19:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
that is just sick dude. Fuck... i dont like it either. god...that is just very very dick. Incest is just bad writing |
Reviewed By: in all honesty On: October 17, 2002 23:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incest, especially when written in the manner which you portrayed is not good reading. The lemon is not written well at all. Write out numbers when you do a fic. The dialogue was rather cheesey. Dick size is overrated and poorly utilized in your fic. Why in the hell does Gohan go along with it? You might want to consider adding an incest warning to your summary.
What the hell happened to ch 2?
the night were chichi and bulma switches place does not suffice. |
