| "Starchild" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Friezas Girl On: March 23, 2002 00:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Frieza...that was so sad!!But true..some things just arnt ment to be.*starts crying waterfall tears* BUT STILL IT'S SO SAD!!
I like how you gave Kold a second chance at love though^_^
Hey could you read mine and tell me what you think? I would be honored if you read it^.^ It's called Flight of Innocence..and I think it's on page 7 at the moment..BUT I WILL UPDATE SOON! I SWEAR! So please read, I would love advice because your writing style is the best!!^_~ |
Reviewed By: oroborus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2002 07:47 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hooray! Correctly used and spelled medical jargon!
Whilst I enjoyed the writing, I felt that the pacing was a bit off. You've written it very smoothly and coherently - however the whole scenario is not like that. It sounds as though everyone should be even less comfortable with dealing with their emotions than they are shown to be here. Making the structure of their thoughts and actions more jarring, less rational, could show this.
Also, I'd like to see more focus on the time before Frieza becomes unable to communicate.
I really liked the way that you portrayed Hell as a place to experience the pain and fear of other people - to die their deaths, almost. Brings a whole new meaning to the phrase, "Hell is other people" ... |
Reviewed By: Alexander [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2002 22:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was long, and it was deep. It was also original because not many people like Frieza and his brethren. It gave me to think about, made me look at Frieza differently. So that means it was pretty good. Keep up the good work. |
Reviewed By: Rockstar Freeza [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2001 01:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not only did this story bring tears to my eyes, but its ending surprised me. I enjoyed every dream sequence, and I could -through your awesome writing skills- literally see him dragging himself across the room like that. This gets a ten. Definately a ten. |
