| "Seal of Aravas" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: vampkestrel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2002 02:09 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow really original keep going |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2002 18:03 CST
Comment/Review:
Ooooh! Cold shower!!! UDPATE !!!!! |
Reviewed By: SBB On: November 03, 2002 21:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, it's an interesting idea but you have a huge plot hole. So far you have managed to completely leave out just what the Seal of Aravas is, what it did (besides a vague 'it protects the kingdom'), and how Vegeta broke it. Since you've chosen to make this the basis of the story it needs to be explained. Also details on how Vegeta was captured. You need details, not vague allusions. |
Reviewed By: Rev Kurame [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2002 19:29 CST
Comment/Review:
interesting so far, really. i like. and this is ur first fic? extra brownie points! u've got a nice style. original concept, overall, it's wonderful! keep it up! can't wait for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 21:29 CST
Comment/Review:
Dammit! So close! >. |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2002 18:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was a great start, please hurry with the next chappy! |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2002 18:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really really REALLY want you to update!!!! |
